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Comments for 'Shadows of Archon II (part 1) - The Lady Speaks'



Sarge
11:42 am | August 20, 2002
Thank you I enjoyed this I was coming into this story kind of negative but I came back once again excited about your writing keep it up.
el_halo_diablo
8:35 pm | August 19, 2002
lol "she is thier perfect 10" lol
Knightmare
6:23 am | August 19, 2002
Sorry I got off topic, lol..

Mainly what you should be worrying about wado is your story and the way you lay it out; we your loyal fans dont give a damn whether you have errors or not, though we try to help you by 'saying there are grammatical errors' since any story is deeper without them!

Anyways, to put it bluntly: Worry about errors but not so much as to forget about the layout, you did nicely in this one, so don't worry about either; trust in your skill, trust in yourself. Trust your soul.

Semper Fidelis Wado!

Knightmare
6:18 am | August 19, 2002
I read it wado, and it is indeed much better than the last few! You made a good judgement with the forward... For that I commend you even more so than I would've had you not done so.

I didn't notice any errors, but then again I had half interest in your story (I regret that it would have been better had I been paying full attention) and half interest in a group work with Archangels_Blade and Spartan415, left a clue in that character... So did Arch, though he didn't know it at the time.

Wado
6:00 am | August 19, 2002
Okay I did it, started the big series. Hopefully I did a better job starting with a foreword this time.

There were a few errors that bothered me, can't find them right now, but one of them was a "want" that should have been a "went". Hopefully the sentence structure is better this time too. Thanks.


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