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Comments for 'The Return of the Archons - or - I dream in Halo'



romac1991
3:39 am | July 19, 2004
Its amazing how this story gets comments well over TWO years.

romac1991
Anonymous
9:40 am | December 12, 2003
its amazing how this story gets comments well over a year after its submission when others are lucky to get one at all
stan
4:57 am | December 9, 2003
Lord a'mighty you write a lot Wado. I haven't read the rest of your stories so I don't know how this fits in the large scheme of things or how it compares to the others. However, this story is done rather well, and I did enjoy it. Quailty effort my friend, quality effort.

Off Topic Note: You may remember writting in a comment to my story My Name is Master Chief and I'm here to say "Wow, stan wrote a fan fic" (or something to that effect). That surprised me because I've written about 6 stories now, and you have commented on at least two of them.
Just thought I'd point that out.

Maybe you were being sarcastic, who knows.
hornet34
5:33 am | November 26, 2003
Well you've heard all the praise before, all I can say is that reminds me of reading an actual book, which in my mind is a huge compliment. Now to follow Jillybean and read the next million chapters.
Pseudonym
6:08 pm | November 24, 2003
Interesting, unusual, but not bad! One note though I think you mean Stone Henge, not Stone Hinge. Otherwise fantastic, I look forward to reading the rest.
Jillybean
1:42 pm | October 19, 2003
Cool - very interesting and you picked present-tense which I find insanely difficult to write in so congratulations on making it work.

Now off to read the next million odd chapters ;)
Wado
1:12 am | May 19, 2003
Why is the first story called "Return" of the Archons? Well it really isn't the first story, just the first one published here but that isn't the point. Nice question and I will try to explain that it is the return of the Archons that have been away for a long time. In the same manner, Halo could have been titled the return of the Flood (although that would give away all the surprises), Return of the Archons is about the return of an Ancient race whom had lost contact with humanity a long time ago.
The 7th Column
3:30 pm | April 26, 2003
Why is the first Archon story called RETURN of the Archons?
GhostmouthZach
2:26 am | February 4, 2003
Pretty sweet, and very awsome
el_halo_diablo
12:54 am | July 25, 2002
wow you guys are so touchy on spelling and grammar. lol its not a bad thing so no offense.
Wado
4:24 am | July 24, 2002
Sarge, Arch, you rule! Thanks for the comments. I'll try to write with less sentence fragments. Right now I'm just in the middle of part 4 of the Return of the Archons. I submitted part 2 a few days ago, but I saw that nothing is going to be posted until after Wednesday. I may have to submit it again when I submit part 3. Anyway, since you like the storyline and writing style, I just might submit part 4 also by the end of the week. Thanks
Sarge
3:25 am | July 24, 2002
I saw perfect so I came running to give advice. First off let me start by saying your writing is beautiful and with great description, and your writing style is simply beautiful perhaps you should think of writing poetry? Well here are the mistakes I found.But not this time. (First off it’s a fragment second off it starts with but) The fear of never waking has saved John before, in a panic he has awoken, but not this time. (See no but or fragment.)Dark hair with strands of gold, silver eyes as gray as the night sky and as piercing as an eagle's stare.(This is a fragment o, even though the sentence is long it’s still a fragment.)A thing existing on logic without compassion.(This is a fragment as well, try this on for size.) But something happened; we met an evil, a plague, a thing existing on logic without compassion. (See that eliminates the need for a second sentence.)Time and the many wars since the olden days have wiped out most of our records.(Still another fragment make sure your sentences are complete.) "There is not much more summary to this story, time and the many wars since the olden days have wiped out most of our records. (Once again no more fragment:-).)Well there's the end... plz this is just advice use it only to strengthen your next piece once again i'll tell you I love this story and your writing style is one of my favorites on HBO.
Arch
8:18 pm | July 23, 2002
Damn. That was awesome. Well, i see that someone else likes the name 'Kira'.... Nevermind. Anyways, i liked your story a helluva lot. It's awesome! And i noticed that the 'My name if Kira' thing was the only mistake in there! Dude, you've gotta be near perfect! Anyways, way to go, man! U rule!
Wado
8:35 am | July 21, 2002
Never fails that I can look over something many times and think it is good to go, but then the first time I see it published, out pops a typo or other mistake. The one that's bugging me should read "My name is Kira, Sovereign Princess of Archon," not "...if Kira, ..." Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story. It was brought up to me that in the story the plague Kira speaks of must be the flood. Well if you like this storyline, wait and see. No spoilers... Thanks.


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