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Comments for 'Siege of Evil: Part 3- The Spreading Darkness' |
Dave Luck
6:20 pm | July 19, 2004
Hold it one second....
I think that this has been another browser glitch! I must have pressed refresh while clicking a wrong link. It sent the comment to the wrong area.
Scratch what I said earlier, because the story shows coding. I don't know what could have happened earlier.
- Sorry, Man, My mistake.
- Dave.
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romac1991
3:29 pm | July 18, 2004
Jesus dave, cut him some freakin slack. If all you do is ramble about the code, that won't get anything acomplished will it. It's best to tell him SPECIFICALLY instead of telling every new person to USE THE CODE. Hell, I didn't use the code till my third story. And you know what, with everyone yelling at me for not using the code, and some downright refusing to read it, I almost quit. Point is, cut him some slack. Just because you used the code on your first story, doens't mean everyone one else is.
romac1991
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Vengeance
1:15 pm | July 18, 2004
Sorry Dave, I don't mean to be a smart ass... but I'm fairly sure I used the code. I indented and did stuff like that. Whened I not use it? What did I miss?
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Dave Luck
12:00 am | July 18, 2004
Being new is not an excuse for not using the code.
Although, I for one am glad that someone is using proper grammar and spelling. And Caps.
- Dave.
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Vengeance
2:47 pm | July 17, 2004
Thanks for the comments guys. I'm kinda new to HBO and writing the fan fiction so I appreciate the helpfull comments. Anyways, i'll try to get the next part posted by Sunday.
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Havok
2:31 pm | July 17, 2004
very nicely written. A suggestion though(one i have trouble following myself)....try not to use the same descriptive words so closely to each other. "the elite quickly drew his sword and quickly ended his life" i used to do that a lot, and the readers really drilled me for it. So let's not let it happen again!...geez, man, how many times do i have to tell you...
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Chuckles
7:50 am | July 17, 2004
Excellent writing. I have a lot of respect for the talent it takes to write from the enemies POV.
The only complaint I would have is that you have the covies acting and reacting like humans. This is mostly a matter of personal preference for me, but I would like to see some truly "alien" behavior from the covies. Now, I write only multiplayer fanfic, so that is easy for me to say, since I never write about the aliens. Still, I would like to see it tried more.
C.T. Clown
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Slit Throat
5:45 pm | July 16, 2004
Very good.
Does the 'legless comrade' have a name?
9/10
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