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Comments for 'SNIPER: Part-Two'



Hunter_Killer
10:23 am | August 21, 2003
Love this, man.
Vege7a
2:33 pm | August 19, 2003
Yes, I have really layed this out. :] The next chapter'll be up soon.
J-pr1m3
6:41 am | August 19, 2003
Excellent, now I'm real excited about this particular story... good job on the uncovering of certain plot details, guys ^_^ (sarcasm)

You've really had this layed out, haven't you, Vege7a? Good job.
Vege7a
9:52 pm | August 16, 2003
Hey Khyber! I didn't say he went deer hunting or goose hunting! Awww geez...I can't hold it in any longer...only...one...word...,:Bounty.
Khyber
1:46 am | August 15, 2003
so he went hunting... big whoop. lots of soldiers in the wars of this past century have been hunters, including those in my family, and the only thing that improves is target practice and tracking. it doesn't teach you how to fight.
Vege7a
11:35 am | August 14, 2003
This is to Supercritical Asshole: He went hunting with Kelly's father. I didn't say hunting what though...it's part of the plot...can't say...
Vege7a
11:33 am | August 14, 2003
Oh and this is to Blade: I have a basic idea of how the BR handles and the Brutes fight because I watched the Halo 2 E3 demo.
Vege7a
11:31 am | August 14, 2003
And isn't anyone wondering why Captain Barnun whoops ass without getting injured? I'll explain that later too.
Vege7a
11:27 am | August 14, 2003
Well first of all, the black armored dudes from Halo 2 are Helljumpers, not regular Marines. The guys in my story are regular Marines...for now ;]

I'll explain how Tallent kills so well in a later chapter.
GLADIATRRR3000
11:06 am | August 14, 2003
good job. 10/10. and it's spelled 'throat', not 'throught'
Blade
11:00 am | August 14, 2003
Yes, it was really good. In fact it is the best fan fiction story I've ever read. Unfortunately, I must agree with J-pr1m3. You killed so many of the upper-class covenant warriors without even breaking a sweat. like when you took out the battle rifle and blew half of the brutes away, i had trouble believing that. especially since if you shot a few the others would come charging and shooting at you and since you aren't master chief and you're only wearing marine armor (is it the halo marine armor or the halo 2 marine armor [the ones with the black armor and helmets as seen in the trailer]?). other than that it was a great story. i have one last question. how do you know what brutes fight like and how the battle rifle fires if halo 2 isn't out yet?

sniper is the only fan fiction i look forwards to reading, so keep up the GREAT WORK!
Supercritical asshole
4:46 am | August 14, 2003
Just a couple of things: J-Pr1m3 he "kills well" because he did hunting with kellys father or something.

i do find the lack of emotion somewhat disturbing, like he's all hapy and stuff but other recruits are dying around him("some of the other recruits were dead and others severely wounded.") and he seems not to care?

and also it is rather unrealistic that he takes on 50 Brutes and they whupass. i mean really these are pretty powerful guys.

As elfster says it sounds like master chief on easy or normal.
a little more realism and this would be good.
Elfster
1:39 am | August 14, 2003
Oh, and good luck!
Elfster
1:35 am | August 14, 2003
I still give it an 8/10 or 9/10. Tallent kills like he's Master Cheif playing on easy or normal. Theres not enough of a struggle. And its throat, not throught. i usually dont correct people on spelling errors but you do that one often. Oh, and how did they all know to throw a grenade at the same time?

They seem pretty dumb-lucky, other than that, good.

And I know you're the one who likes a good fight scene, so im gonna give you a hint. Its better to have a longer fight scene with more struggle than go slaughtering everything
Vege7a
10:26 pm | August 13, 2003
The next one's gonna' be pretty long, so it'll be out in a few days maybe...
Vege7a
10:24 pm | August 13, 2003
Maybe so J-pr1m3. ;]
J-pr1m3
10:01 pm | August 13, 2003
"God-damn it Tallent, you never cease to amaze me!" -Captain Barnun

Well, I do agree, it is much better and you have certainly improved... It's gonna be nice to watch this series grow up! Hehe :) More descriptions! They're really getting there!

And maybe Tallent has a little secret or background info to how he kills so well...
[8.5/10]
Spartan 117
9:47 pm | August 13, 2003
it was a pretty good save from the last one and certainly better. Though you still manage to kill the upper-class covenant warriors with extreme ease, and that bothers me. 7.5/10.
Vege7a
7:35 pm | August 13, 2003
THANX :]
pooman
4:44 pm | August 13, 2003
good 10/10


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