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Comments for 'The Mind That Made War (part 1)'



stars n' stripes
6:48 pm | May 26, 2003
america is cool
HaloFREAK
12:09 pm | March 16, 2003
sarges cap was better, but this still is great
monitor101
3:13 am | March 10, 2003
hell if I know its your fan fic I don't really care about the forerunner.
Dirty Commie
10:18 pm | March 9, 2003
Nice. I liked this a lot better than the typical "OH GOD MY FACE HAS BEEN MELTED OFF! THE AGONY!!!! AUUGH!"

It's interesting to read a take on the Covenants formation and motivation to kill all ze humans.

Going a little more in-depth on each chapter would be really cool, I think. Also, make sure you indent each paragraph, don't just hit return. (or was that a glitch?)

Overall, great effort! Gon' go read next one nows!
Traumatised Marine
8:37 pm | March 9, 2003
So you didn't like it as much as my last fic 101?
I like this one more than 'Under the Sergeant's Cap.'

Interesting.

What should I have done better in this fic?
monitor101
7:18 pm | March 9, 2003
Not the best but pretty kool.
Traumatised Marine
5:01 pm | March 9, 2003
Just testing for bugs folks!


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