 |
About This Site
Daily Musings
News
News Archive
Site Resources
Concept Art
Halo Bulletins
Interviews
Movies
Music
Miscellaneous
Mailbag
HBO PAL
Game Fun
The Halo Story
Tips and Tricks
Fan Creations
Wallpaper
Misc. Art
Fan Fiction
Comics
Logos
Banners
Press Coverage
Halo Reviews
Halo 2 Previews
Press Scans
Community
HBO Forum
Clan HBO Forum
ARG Forum
Links
Admin
Submissions
Uploads
Contact
|
|
|
Comments for 'Under the sergeant's cap Chapters 1-7' |
Hunter Killer
2:04 am | April 5, 2003
This was a DAMN good read. Have you ever considered being a proffesional writer.
|
Boxer
1:57 pm | March 1, 2003
I have to say that was awesome. I hear the new HALO novel is supposed to be about the same thing, i.e. what goes on between mission. I can only hope it's as good as this was.
|
2nd Lt. Brick Road
6:22 am | March 1, 2003
I've been looking for an excuse to explain the orgins of my local chapter.. Maybe a fanfiction excuse. Heh. Good job retelling the story through the eyes of Sarge and taking a stab at describing that mysterious Command Shuttle..
|
Arthur Wellesly
1:02 am | February 27, 2003
You can submit today, according to Louis, Lord of Lords and King of Kings of fan fiction.
|
Sarge
11:26 pm | February 26, 2003
Good job Louis glitch seems fixed thanks!
|
moniter101
10:38 pm | February 26, 2003
Wuz up ya'll hows it goin dude thank god we can finally sumbbit fan fic but can we subbmit today or tomorrow?!!!
|
Nike
6:54 pm | February 26, 2003
Praise the Lord O Jesus Christ!!!! We can submit fan fiction again!!! Halujeah!!!! Halujeah!!!!!
|
Louis Wu
1:27 pm | February 26, 2003
Just a test - someone stated they couldn't post, I found a small bug in all filenames starting with 't'. Just making sure it's fixed.
|
Arthur Wellesly
8:15 pm | February 23, 2003
Oooooh! Thanks el_halo_diablo. It was really bugging me.
|
el_halo_diablo
6:13 pm | February 23, 2003
Aurthur, it is a heart. It took me a couple times to notice what it was also.
|
Sagre
11:51 pm | February 22, 2003
Moniter 101 I might not continue the story since this is primarily where I post it but I have a new one I'm putting on there.
|
moniter101
10:12 pm | February 22, 2003
I think Ape Man is the only author who has been subbmiting fan fic since the begining.
|
Arthur Wellesly
6:11 pm | February 22, 2003
I wasn't being blasphemous. Allow me to explain.
I attempted to ask the meaning of that arrow followed by a three (you know, that symbol that always comes up when Brian Morden is mentioned), but it would not let me post it.
So, what does it mean?
|
moniter101
6:02 pm | February 22, 2003
Hey Sarge if you lose interest in HBO then will you subbmit fan fic to fanfiction.net?
|
moniter101
6:00 pm | February 22, 2003
I myself have another story that I'm writing up.
|
Traumatised Marine
5:21 pm | February 22, 2003
And Mr. Wellesly, it appears whatever your question is, it is denined by the will of the server-spirits of Aitchbeeyo.
DO NOT BE BLASPHEMOUS!!
|
Traumatised Marine
5:19 pm | February 22, 2003
Nobody's making out as if it is 'winning something'
It was just a joke people, honest!
|
Knightmare(MM
2:35 pm | February 22, 2003
To address the top of the list thing, it does not mean the story won something, its just a placement thing.
Whatever goes on the bottom of the list at the main news page, will go on the top on the fan fiction page. Likely something to do with the set-up Louis has got going. I believe its based off the date and time of the story submission.
The more recent your submission is, the more likely it is to be at the bottom of the news page list, and at the top of the fan fiction list.
-Knightmare, Merry Marines
|
Arthur Wellesly
2:05 pm | February 22, 2003
Rrrright, I'm scared...
|
Arthur Wellesly
2:01 pm | February 22, 2003
Okay, sorry 'bout that...
What does a
|
Arthur Wellesly
2:01 pm | February 22, 2003
Okay, sorry 'bout that...
What does a
|
Arthur Wellesly
1:57 pm | February 22, 2003
I, too, have some stories ready....
But yea, I found it irritating that at the moment I started writing the ffn section stopped being updated, but if I said I blamed the guy, I'd be lying. I know if I were him I would have jumped off some very tall structure long ago.
BTW, if you guys wouldn't mind, what does
|
Arthur Wellesly
1:57 pm | February 22, 2003
I, too, have some stories ready....
But yea, I found it irritating that at the moment I started writing the ffn section stopped being updated, but if I said I blamed the guy, I'd be lying. I know if I were him I would have jumped off some very tall structure long ago.
BTW, if you guys wouldn't mind, what does
|
Traumatised Marine
8:21 am | February 22, 2003
Believe me I'm making sure I thank Lu each time I send him an email. To remind him I am very grateful for his work, CHEERS LWU!
And I do have more fiction brewing.
|
Bean
4:21 am | February 22, 2003
Amen
|
Bean
4:16 am | February 22, 2003
Aye aye.
|
el_halo_diablo
11:33 pm | February 21, 2003
Don't worry about it TM, if you had to keep formatting people's fan fics non-stop for three years, for no pay, wouldn't you want a break. The ffn section will be opened in time. In the meantime, start writing another series, and have it waiting for when louis opens it back up. :)
|
Sarge
10:52 pm | February 21, 2003
I'm rapidly losign interest in HBO RAPIDLY!!! The reason I would come was for the fan fiction section. While I was here I would check out everything else. However, now that the ff section isn't updated I see little need to come here. I'm not complaning... you know what I AM!
|
Arthur Wellesly
12:31 pm | February 21, 2003
Rrrrright........
|
weedman
12:09 pm | February 21, 2003
hey diablo i'm australian asshole. i'm goin to get hi.
|
el_halo_diablo
11:42 pm | February 20, 2003
well I usually only take a joke if they say it's one, so it's all good. Hey i was wondering, do teens in australia say "wazzup?". (lol i was just wondering.)
|
weedman
9:22 pm | February 20, 2003
hey tm i'm not hi today auz i hit myself in the head and swore not to smoke today u gave me the idea to smoke weed not from a bong but from a pipe thank u for everything now if u'll excuse me i'm goin to get hi.
|
Traumatised Marine
4:50 pm | February 20, 2003
Be careful Aurthur, my old mucker, or I might jolly well be jumped into using my cracking whole knowledge of English English upon you fellows!
'Chuffed' means flattered, though I've never heard anyone use the term 'cloddish'
And I don't think el_halo_diablo was being uncivil, I just hope he wasn't stirred into making the comment because he mistook my jokey mock-arrogance for genuine arrogance.
|
Arthur Wellesly
4:30 pm | February 20, 2003
Hahaha, TM, I love English history, but I don't pretend to like some of their meals or, in this case, understand some of their terms.
In short, what does "chuffed" mean in this context?
And to El Halo Diablo, don't you think we should keep this civil? Even in my comments section when people were bombarding the poor old Americans with untasteful comments, I wasn't quite so "cloddish", as TM might say.
|
el_halo_diablo
12:18 pm | February 20, 2003
Well, we'll just see how grand it is once it's off the front page TM. If it still gets posts then I'll give a short to applaude you. In fact, my old comedy "Mis-Adventures of Master Chief" still gets replies every once in a while, funny thing is, it's like 14-17 pages back I think(it was posted in August). Man I can't wait until the ffn section is opened back up again, i'm looking forward to new material.
|
Traumatised Marine
8:33 am | February 20, 2003
To: el_halo_diablo
I was just using a little bit of mock-arrogant humour, e_h_d. Make no mistake, I haven't convinced myself I've written an epic or something, I was just joking.
But cheers, I'll go and read 'Misadventurs of MC' and update your collection of comments!
To the duke of wellington (Arthur):
Very chuffed with the score!
|
weedmannnnnnnn
2:19 am | February 20, 2003
hey trampitised marine how do you role a joint cauz i smoke it from a bong/
|
Arthur Wellesly
11:03 pm | February 19, 2003
I realize now that text does not do a rating of a stroy justice. Thus I will turn my comment into a number:
9.9/10
Excellent work, Marine! You make me proud! :)
|
Traumatised Marine
12:42 pm | February 19, 2003
Yes, he is Stacker, I get the feeling, 101, that you didn't read the WHOLE story when you made your first comment...
And yes, the story is still here, I'm benefitting from the fan fiction overhaul LWu is having.
(OR MAYBE IT's 'CAUSE THE STORY IS SO DAMN GOOD!!! Ahem...)
And to everyone else: Yes, this is my story comments page, I spent lots 'o time writing UtSC, and it's a pretty good read, so feel free to put an actual comment about it at some point!
|
moniter101
4:41 am | February 19, 2003
Hey Traumatised when I posted my first comment yes I didn't read the whole story I skipped through most of the chapters because I've already read them and didn't bother to read revised chapters.
|
moniter101
3:33 am | February 18, 2003
FINALLY TRAUMATISED YOU USE STACKER.
|
el_halo_diablo
10:41 pm | February 17, 2003
lol this post section isn't even about TM story anymore lol.
Well, my best regards to Brian
|
Sarge
9:45 pm | February 17, 2003
HMMM I left for a week and came back and this story is still on top??? Did I miss something???
|
moniter101
10:09 pm | February 16, 2003
I never knew Brian M. but have heard of him and I will never forget him as long as I live.
|
Arthur Wellesly
2:42 pm | February 16, 2003
Well put.
God rest his soul. Brian will no doubt find eternal happiness in the afterlife. I am fairly new to this site and it's forums, and I never really knew Brian, yet I am touched by his brave story.
My prayers go to him.
|
Traumatised Marine
10:25 am | February 16, 2003
We will always, every one of us, come to draw strength from god when we fall upon hard ground, the fact that we have this in our nature, is proof that the concept of God is true.
Amen.
|
Goldie
2:53 am | February 16, 2003
TM, wonderful piece of work! I really enjoyed this story.
|
AlphaBravo343
2:06 am | February 16, 2003
lol i thought it didnt save it
|
moniter101
2:05 am | February 16, 2003
Amen AlphaBravo343!
|
AlphaBravo343
2:01 am | February 16, 2003
*Him
|
AlphaBravo343
1:59 am | February 16, 2003
Not just in dark times my friends, but at all times look to the Him
|
AlphaBravo343
1:59 am | February 16, 2003
not just in dark times, my friends, but at all times look to him
|
moniter101
1:41 am | February 16, 2003
(To Arthur Wellesly) Yes there is a god in your darkest hour look to god for comfort.
|
Tank
9:20 pm | February 15, 2003
Amen
|
Arthur Wellesly
9:17 pm | February 15, 2003
If there is indeed a God, then Amen.
|
moniter101
6:49 pm | February 15, 2003
And my best wishes to his family losing a loved one is not easy.
|
moniter101
6:42 pm | February 15, 2003
My thoughts and prairs go out to Brian Morden and his family. And now I will say a quick prair for him.
"Heavenly father give him everlasting life and bring him to salvation amen." All in favor say Amen.
|
Traimatised Marine
9:08 pm | February 14, 2003
Aye!
|
moniter101
8:41 pm | February 14, 2003
Traumatised your one of the best damn authors in this site and you know what i think i think there should be a day completly dedicated to Louis Wu. He does everything for this site all in favor say Aye.
|
janglurevil7
12:54 pm | February 14, 2003
wow, all i can say is wow. and...: I LOVED THIS!!!!!! but at the end, whre it said that BEnjamin S. Johnson dies, i got scared. That is my EXACT name, no BS.
|
AlphaBravo343
4:27 am | February 14, 2003
firstly, all i can say is.....DUDE!.....simply incredible. It's been an ongoin discussion between my friends and I about what happens to the marines between the times when you interact with them in the game. You captured the feel of weariness of the sergeant, and his loss of hope. This story made me feel like you had consultation from bungie! You capture the readers' attention from the beginning and take them on a wild ride without letting go! This has inspired me to follow up on my own halo writing abitions. keep up the good work and I hope to see more sagas from the halo universe soon!
|
Phat Bob
4:12 am | February 14, 2003
After reading this wounderful piece of writing all I can say is, WHOA! I loved every sentence of it. I would have loved it even more had the Sarge somehow survived and made it out. It could have gone on to the part up to the Legendary Ending, where he is still struggling with an elite. I thought that was going to happen, but I guess you wanted a bit of surprise in there. Either way, you filled my brain with hours of enjoyment. Thank You.
|
Arthur Wellesly
6:51 pm | February 13, 2003
Whoa! Talk about your awsome stories. I actually started reading it at lunch time, and I got so caught up I was late for school. Your story is as well written and as well thought of as your comments, Marine. Kudos.
My two favorite parts had to be the conversation between Johnson and Stacker. It was a very natural, flowing piece of writing which I thoroughly enjoyed. I also loved how well you did the ending. The fear that must have been going through the Marines was done so well in your story that it actually had my heart pounding.
The best thing overall was how well you made it flow. I thought any story that followed the Halo story so closely would be predictable and choppy, but you made it so original and well written that had there been no game called "Halo", I would have instantly believed that your plot was your completely of your own making. It takes a certain type of person to do that as effectively as you did.
I believe in constructive criticism, but I am sitting here and I can think of few things that were wrong in your story. Frankly, the only minor detail that was slightly off was that a Lieutenant addressed Sergeant Johnson as "sir", but nobody addresses a NCO as "sir", especially not a Lieutenant, who is, in fact, an officer.
However this has nothing to do with your writing, which was both fluent and powerful. This was absolutely the best piece of writing from a non-professional author I have ever had the privilege of reading. I look forward to any other stories written by you in the future.
|
Traumatised Marine
12:54 pm | February 13, 2003
And to the people who might be daunted by the quantity, I stress, read it!
I think you'll be glad you did.
(Yeah I know I'm boasting, but it is worth it!)
|
Traumatised Marine
12:47 pm | February 13, 2003
ACK!! I ASKED Louis to just put Under The Sergeant's Cap as the title.
Everyone please realise this is the full story, with two NEW chapters!!!
Chapters 6 and 7 are plenty of new material to keep you busy!!
It was supposed to have some illustration also, but I supposed Louis couldn't put it in, (if anyone wants it then e-mail me and I'll send it them!)
The reason I sent the whole story was because chapter two is missing in my 'read this series' hyperlink.
THIS IS MOST CERTAINLY NOT A REVISION!!!
|
el_halo_diablo
12:47 pm | February 13, 2003
So you just HAD to revise the first 5 chapters, then cram in two new chapters? phhh! You should really try to go by the rules that Louis has constituted, also, it's a pain in the ass for ME to read :|. Anyway, Good luck on another series, hopefully it's something truly original.
|
Sarge
12:27 pm | February 13, 2003
Hmmm I thought a while back Louis said no revisions? I wanna revise mine it's so horrid at the begginning my grammar and spelling was ack!
|
Traumatised Marine
8:41 am | February 13, 2003
You people MUST read the WHOLE thing before you say what you think! I understand el_halo_diablo and others look for more than fightscenes, and if you read it, you'll see there is much more than the above! Don't judge it on the first few paragraphs, the ending scene and an illustration, that's insulting considering the time it took to write.
|
el_halo_diablo
4:27 am | February 13, 2003
Ok sorry about the harsh comment, i just read some of it, and it was quite amusing (mostly the picture lol). The ending was just as it should have been.
|
Traumatised Marine
8:19 pm | February 12, 2003
To Hikaru:I suppose you mean the "space exploration is for humanity, not just Americans" thing huh?Only very ignorant people could hate a whole nation, that's a hell of a lot of people to judge when you know basically none of them. I dont think there are such ignorant people on this site, so I guess Im saying that there is no hatred as such. (And let's not turn these comment sections into ethical discussion forums, they're for comments on fan fic.)
To Bloodcider: Benseti??? Bisenti=yes Benseti=huh?
|
Bloodcider
8:15 pm | February 12, 2003
oh, one thing i noticed. Benseti is the Asian Guy w\\ the bandana, right?
Well at the Guilty Spark part of the story, you have Benseti taking the role of Vinceti.
|
Hikaru-119
6:42 pm | February 12, 2003
Good writing Traumatised. I enjoyed your fanfic, but I've got a question.
I'm I the only American tat thinks there is a bit of...international rivalry/hatred on this site? Escpecially in the post comments section. None the less keep on writing.
|
McDuffRedSkies
6:38 pm | February 12, 2003
The final few scenes were magic, u knew what was going to happen and you felt like screaming at sarge to get out! All the apearances of sarge and squad in the game were explained beleivably in this story.
AWESOME!!!
|
Bloodcider
5:21 pm | February 12, 2003
Amazing Work. I loved how you did the dialog and cutscenes from the game.
|
Tank
3:24 pm | February 12, 2003
Best. God. Damn. Fan. Fic.I've.Read.
|
Tank
3:24 pm | February 12, 2003
Best. God. Damn. Fan. Fic.I've.Read.
|
Louis Wu
2:28 pm | February 12, 2003
The title IS Under the sergeant's cap. If I'd left the chapter listing off, it would conflict with older copies of the same files. (This is one of the BIGGEST reasons we've asked for no revisions - they're a pain in the ass.)
And the pic is there, and showing - I'm not sure what you're talking about. It's exactly where you had it in the word doc you sent.
As for chapter two missing in the 'read this series' link... good lord. I have email; if I make a mistake, send me a note and I'll fix it. You mean I had to format the first 5 chapters again because you were too lazy to write and say "hey, chapter 2 isn't showing up in the series link"?
Gah.
|
|
