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Comments for 'Fall of Rye: Chapter 5: Beginning of a Suicide Mission'



teemus
10:57 pm | April 12, 2004
Any more comments?
teemus
4:42 pm | April 12, 2004
Sounds good.
Helljumper
1:55 am | April 12, 2004
teemas i'm gonna copy and paste ya whole story in word and read it str8 through then i'll email u with my opinions to help you out. i would expect you to do the same for me if needed.
teemus
1:10 am | April 12, 2004
Thanks for the post Helljumper, everybody has their opinion. If you could tell me something to improve on, then the next chapters could be better. Chief, they most likley did reject it.
Awacar
10:32 pm | April 11, 2004
Maybe didn't meet the criteria from Wu. Every last bit of it will have to be fully meeting the criteria, or... poff! story rejected. :(
Chief17
7:35 pm | April 11, 2004
Teemus i have a question. i wrote a story a week ago and they still never posted it.Why?
Helljumper
3:30 pm | April 10, 2004
When i first started reading your series, i didn't like it. There was something missing and i didn't like the way it flowed and how the battle scenes were done, but i read them all just because they involve ODST. This chapter was good, but you used the name Jason as the start of almost every sentence and this was repettitive and took away from it.

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hoorah Marine Corps
3:43
11:24 am | April 10, 2004
'Realistic and exciting!'
3:43
11:24 am | April 10, 2004
See? You can stick that on the front cover! ;)


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