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Comments for 'The Fall of Rye: Chapter 3: Taking the Bait' |
teemus
12:33 pm | March 10, 2004
Thanks guys, ill try to fix em up a bit. Ive just had lots of homework.
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CoLd BlooDed
11:35 pm | March 9, 2004
He should make them longer and describe the actions, surroundings, etc. more. I've told him this...but...he doesn't seem to listen. :P
I still like this one, teemus, but try and make them longer, try and make them descriptive, try and pull the readers in so they don't want to stop.
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Helljumper
8:46 pm | March 9, 2004
I think it was ok, seemed kinda rushed. something was missing, or maybe it is just me
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ToFu
6:45 pm | March 9, 2004
Not bad, I agree with that Bafoon, I mean Awacar, ur text ws pretty good, I liked it indeed...
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teemus
4:29 am | March 9, 2004
Thanks guys. Any more comments?
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Thomas Harper
9:53 pm | March 8, 2004
nice i thought that it was deffitley up in ur top 3 nice job.
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Awacar
2:30 pm | March 8, 2004
Like how the title reflects the text.
The text was good, absolutely, but I think you've done better. Still, good work!
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