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Comments for 'Project-Halo Chapter One: Halo-Omega'



spikedadragon
1:26 am | September 29, 2002
If anyone cares, Chapter two is up.And chapter 3 and 4 should follow soon.LatazSpike
Anonymous
12:30 am | June 5, 2002
10:oopm / June fourth,2002 Marine 124Why the hell are people saying your story is kinda weak? I mean its excellent for your first time!Looking forward to seeing Chapter 2!
SpikeDaDragon
3:56 pm | May 27, 2002
Actauly it is somewhat my first story.. at least based on a game.. And yea it is more like amovie script, in my mind that makes it different and pretty sweet. To answer your question TrueNike, the thing is Mendez happened to find out about Halo from a probe that was encompassing the area around it. Therefore he was briefed in time.Jehkoh, it's nice to think that everything happened so instantly, but it didn't. In fact, from the book "Fall Of Reach", it's cut-throat action.. Thinkabout it, after finding out that the Covenant are following John, and the flood had escaped in life-pods... It's odvious that things on "OutLook" will be fast paced.. Their in urgency to fight, basicly :)Anywayz, thanks for the comments, look for chapter 2 sometime soon..LatazSpike
TrueNike
12:43 pm | May 26, 2002
What I mean by style, is that your story sounds like a movie script.
Jehkoh
11:22 am | May 23, 2002
Work on your style some. Don't make things happen so instantly. After so many years of never seeing eachother, Mendez and MC are just going to say "Good to see you." Adding the word "damn" to all that doesn't really convey emotion. Lol.
TrueNike
10:23 pm | May 22, 2002
Good story, weak style and references. For example, how could Mendez know about Halo before John told him.
ssjbrk
5:02 pm | May 21, 2002
Is this your first story ? Kinda weak on the structure.


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