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Comments for 'Halo 2: New Mombasa Part 1'



Cody
4:17 pm | July 15, 2003
hurry up man!
Cody
1:48 am | July 10, 2003
Me again. are you gonna finish it?

HURRY!
Anonymous
5:20 pm | July 1, 2003
real cool...9.5/10
Cody
2:22 am | June 30, 2003
Dude,it was incredible!!! Seriously, I thought I was watching the demo. You do have great potential and talent. The extras that weren't in
the demo were good too. you have got to finish it man!!!!!!


Keep up the good work.

Cody
Steele
10:24 pm | June 29, 2003
Very good. You have potential, just watch the grammar...
Vege7a
1:37 pm | June 29, 2003
Very good, I felt like I was reading something Eric Nylund or William C. Dietz wrote! And the dialouge was almost exactly the same as it is in the demo. All you need to do is continue it!
yo
2:31 am | June 28, 2003
very nice job with the dialogue. made me feel like i was watching the demo. finish it!
Grammar...
10:14 pm | June 27, 2003
When people talk to eachother you need to add a new line.
AlphaBravo343
6:29 pm | June 27, 2003
A good conversion of the demo. One thing though, use the indent tool "[indent]" and start a new line when someone speaks. For those of us who have seen the demo, we know who is speaking where, but others can become lost. Good work otherwise. 9/10


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