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Comments for 'Prodigal Son: Part 1'



Berconius
12:56 pm | March 4, 2004
Hey, no worries. It's a fine fic. Storywise, it's moving along just fine. I'd really like to see why you call this series Prodigal Son.
Scott D
8:46 am | March 3, 2004
Thanks for the advice, I'll play a closer look to it in the future, and as for grammatical errors, I suppose I might have missed a few. But I'm a tech writer, I dont normally have too many absurd grammatical erros. If they were there, I'm guessing it's from typos I didnt notice rather than a lack of grammatical knowledge. Plus... I dohave a run on problem.
Wiley
11:24 pm | March 2, 2004
How about paragraphs..period. I'm suprised that i took the time to read that...

Split it up into paragraphs....

im tired so i wont give you a grammar lesson...i give that job to whoever wannts the task...*coughgoodluckcough*

4/10
blocky
MC's Cousin
6:00 pm | March 2, 2004
Pretty good. You have soem good descriptive in there, and flow isn't seeming to be a problem. I would suggest that you break stuff up in the future, into more paragraphs. Makes thing easier to read.

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