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Comments for 'Grunt Foo Chapter 1A: The Food Nipple'



Mainevent
12:52 am | May 1, 2004
Shiot, at my school its the sophomores and juniors who walk around school at two miles an hour in groups that block the whole hall.
Mind_Affecting_Parasite
8:36 pm | April 30, 2004
Being my young sixteen year-old self, I can't help but not like Freshmen, at least in the flesh. They walk down the hallway, five people across, and at about point two miles an hour. At that point I have to rely on my handy Hunter body guard to make a convienently wide path to walk through. But then the administration makes ME clean up the mess. Argg...

-MAP
Riely217
8:51 pm | April 29, 2004
meant to say point
Riley217
8:49 pm | April 29, 2004
very um, interesting I think. Is there a piont to this?
Mainevent
7:14 pm | April 29, 2004
I knew what you meant. I am in highschool.
MC's Cousin
12:59 pm | April 29, 2004
Well I was refering to those of Highschool in preticular, but...

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Mainevent
12:48 am | April 29, 2004
"It's an alternate portrayal of Freshmen"

I resent that comment. I'll have you know that I'm a freshman.
Nick Kang
8:49 pm | April 27, 2004
Silver Spartan: Actually yes, it is. Why just today in school he seemed like he was trying to pretend he was having a seizure.

NK
MC's Cousin
8:44 pm | April 27, 2004
As simple as Helljumper's comment was...you need to listen. I mean, sometimes it is okay to add bits of "not a storyline" in there. But trying to make an entire series just wont work. Having Grunts running around acting stupid isn't really a story. It's an alternate portrayal of Freshmen. Add a plot, something that makes the reader want to read farther into your story.

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The Silver Spartan
4:21 pm | April 27, 2004
NK- could one of those retard mode people be Shawn? Lol
Helljumper
3:25 pm | April 27, 2004
yea there is no story line
someone that you dont know
11:54 am | April 27, 2004
Nice. Pretty good. Made me laugh at some parts. You know the good thing about comedies is that when you are writing them, you can just switch to "Retard Mode" and put together a crappy story (Not saying this one was crappy. In a matter of fact, this one was one of the better comedies) When it comes to comedies, its not about the quality of the content, but its all about the message that gets through.
Slayer Boi
2:08 am | April 27, 2004
Hehehehe 1 of 2 comedies that made me laugh. i think it was because it was simple and a good subject for a comedy. i really enjoyed it. also they are all really really dumb assed hehehehehe
-SB
Nick Kang
12:34 am | April 27, 2004
lol...I know a few people that are in retard mode a lot...
(not on the site)

NK
Dark-NiTe
7:12 pm | April 26, 2004
The title alone made me run away and cry in a corner.
anonymous
1:57 pm | April 26, 2004
interesting title
MC's Cousin
1:42 pm | April 26, 2004
I'm just making a wild guess. This is supposed to be a comedy, right?

Well, it is kinda good, but it needs just a hint of storyline in there somewhere. You will learn that I really like good stoylines. Like, oh I don't know, HALO. For the first of the series it was ok. You might need to develop the stupidity of the Grunts more...er not.

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