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Comments for '999th Marine Division: Battle for Seeron: Part one'

6:12 pm | July 16, 2004
I enjoyed your story, all you need is more discriptive facts. Also, I know Helljumpers are brave and well trained, but I don't think one could take three Elites by himself. Keep the story coming.
7:03 pm | May 30, 2004
I bet there isn't even a real 999th Marine Division...is there?!?!?! IS THERE?!?!?! *evil eye*
4:26 pm | May 30, 2004
Make your combat more descriptive. "All eight elites fell under gunfire" isn't interesting to read. Try and put some suspense in there too.
1:41 pm | May 30, 2004
First you have to use the code. Second there were a lot of military facts problems. I'll let someone else get into those. Third, I know ODST are brave and do dangerous stuff, but i know for a fact that they can't fly Covenant dropships. The story got boring and confusing at the end, and your attempt at comedy was not good.


watch how you write aobut my ODST