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Comments for 'The Raptros Saga: Ch.1: Awakening'



Raptros-v75
9:45 pm | March 2, 2004
well, i had meant to save that information for the next chapter, but somone needed to have that info NOW

so, baseically, youll understand in the next chapter

i am still saying it, in the next chapter

i'm going to send it in tonight, hopefully
IAmDelta
4:43 am | March 2, 2004
Not bad at all. The style is good, the plot engaging. In regards to your post below...if that is the case say it in the story. I warn you that it sounds like a magic line (if something is completely implausible just chalk it up to magic), i.e. you don't have a good answer so you just came up with these clauses which make the story work. Oh well, it cannot be changed now. It would be worth your while to see these things before you post and fix them then though... Good luck.
Raptros-v75
11:32 pm | March 1, 2004
he's not coveneant, as you will find out in later chapters. i have a nice suprise for you

secondly, he isn't really loose, the placed a special device that will pump a paralysing substance into him if he turns on them

thirdly, the weapons have a device that prevents them from firing, if the humans doon't want him too

fourthly, at the end, i wrote that he had proven to the humans that he was on their side

thank you for the time you took to read my writing, and i will try to right
Solidus Snake
8:46 pm | February 29, 2004
.....wierd.....I like wierd stuff.....I'm so wierd....
Dark-NiTe
12:56 pm | February 29, 2004
Wow...thats pretty umm...unique. (Leans back in chair, and then dismisses the thought of saying any more.)
Helljumper
6:58 pm | February 28, 2004
Freaky shit
Nick Kang
12:40 pm | February 28, 2004
Good story. The only thing wrong is I don't think the Techs would just let some kind of Covenant super-soldier roam freely in the base loaded up with all those guns.


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