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Comments for 'A Reason To Fight (II)'



Slit Throat
7:01 pm | July 15, 2004
Very nice.

As a rule of thumb, always type out numbers. One, two three instead of 1, 2, 3.

Other than that, everything has been spoken for.

8/10
thedarkfire
3:57 pm | July 15, 2004
Did you mean to spell July like that on purpose or did you want to write julie?
MC's Cousin
3:54 pm | July 15, 2004
Well, I don't know if you knew this, but I'm allowed to be an ass. Why? Well actually, I'm not quite sure, but I still know that I'm allowed to be as much of an ass as I please. Especially with this whole n00b invation.
As for constructive criticism, I can't give it to you if I don't get past the first sentense of your story. With a the drawl one can find in the HBO FF page nowadays, people like me just don't have time to read stories by people who don't even bother to capitilize the first letter of their story. Especially with this whole n00b invation.

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MCC
A Fan
12:03 am | July 15, 2004
yeah I know I always says ''update soon '' ,but hay update soon ^___^ good story .
A Fan
12:00 am | July 15, 2004
update soon
Phoenix99
6:25 pm | July 14, 2004
Geeze, what's with everybody on this forum? Everybody puts each other down about their writing style or mistakes. Constructive criticism is cool, and much applauded, but don't be an ass about it. It would be greatly appreciated by me, and I'm sure many others.
Phoenix99
6:25 pm | July 14, 2004
Thanks for the kind words MC's Cousin. I want constructive criticism, I like it, because it will make you a better writer, but don't be an ass about it.
MC's Cousin
4:39 pm | July 14, 2004
Agreed. Longer can be better.
Oh, by the way, I decided to dicontinue my pursuit of your writing when I noticed that the first letter in the whole story wasn't in caps. Don't do that kind of stuff again. Here, I'll even be nice and add: please.

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MCC
Phoenix99
9:09 pm | July 13, 2004
Oh yeah, thanks for the heads up 'jumper.
Helljumper
8:33 pm | July 13, 2004
Pretty, good. Could have been longer. If you write in Microsoft word like I do, then each post should be like 4 full pages. Oh Yea Marine is always capitalized.

ODST


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