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Comments for 'This is Suicide: Chapter 5'



Gunny 343
9:29 pm | December 9, 2002
I highly enjoyeed the series up to now, please continue the good work. Well done!
Wado
6:49 pm | December 9, 2002
Nice action, I particularly like your descriptions.

This chapter seemed to jump around a little more than usual, I think it might help to add a bit more transition between moving from one scene to the next.

Good job though, keep it up, it really seems to be getting interesting.


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