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Comments for 'Halo: Hunted-Part One' |
Overwhelming Force
9:09 pm | December 23, 2003
by the way, the e-mail address in the comment below is mine, i just mixed up the boxes by mistake.
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iamapsychopathichermit@hotmail.com
6:20 pm | December 22, 2003
Thanks Hawk7886, the second part may not be as good, but the third part will be a lot better.
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Hawk7886
9:38 am | December 21, 2003
You have set up a very nice story, I can't wait to see where you take this :)
Even though it wasn't spaced out, the rhythm of the story kept it from being a problem.
9/10
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Overwhelming Force
8:55 am | December 21, 2003
I apologize, i know i need more indents and returns, but i write them in word, so when I copy and paste it over it just comes out like that. I'll watch out for that in future.
Thanx FORErunnER I see what you mean. It only clicked when I reread it. Soz, I'll try to avoid that in other fanfics I write.
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FOrunnER
7:09 pm | December 20, 2003
yeah, but there not stupid. They probably would use Grunts if it was a suicide rush.
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FOrunnER
7:09 pm | December 20, 2003
Anyway, a pretty nice story. However the grunt, Kakap, seems a little to defiant. If he got angry at his leader he would most likely have been executed by now. And there motives seem contradictory to there actions. They made a suicide charge at a human base, when there orders were to capture them. Wouldn't they use an ambush if they wanted to capture them?
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FOrunnER
7:09 pm | December 20, 2003
Anyway, a pretty nice story. However the grunt, Kakap, seems a little to defiant. If he got angry at his leader he would most likely have been executed by now. And there motives seem contradictory to there actions. They made a suicide charge at a human base, when there orders were to capture them. Wouldn't they use an ambush if they wanted to capture them?
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Mainevent
6:58 pm | December 20, 2003
Actually, in Halo: First Strike, elites will charge in by the hundreds even if it means they'll get cut down. They are highly proud and ferocious warriors.
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Capo Rip
5:12 pm | December 20, 2003
Okay. Indents and more RETURNS would help the presentation. I don't think Elites would charge a human position just to be cut down, the novels make it clear that they'd use Grunts as canon fodder for such an attack.
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Overwhelming Force
12:54 pm | December 20, 2003
thanx helljumper, ill try and make it good.
by the way, DUDE, it tells you the radio was in the Pelican
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Helljumper
7:39 am | December 20, 2003
very good, i'm interested in seeing whats going to happen
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DUDE
8:33 pm | December 19, 2003
Why not report that they were being followed?
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