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Comments for 'UNSC Special Forces: Proluge'



crashedwarthog
9:20 am | December 17, 2003
another piece of fucking shit. u suck, and again, learn how to write
CoLd BlooDed
1:34 am | November 19, 2003
Plus your only twelve.
Advisorer
5:48 pm | November 18, 2003
Hey Nightblade, critisism may be good, it isn't only Walker who is reading your stories. Walker is good, and take the advises he give you. I don't mean to piss you, but take the advise of writing a little more mature next time you give a comment. And, a reasonably good "forum" climate around the fanfics is good for everyone. If you keep going on like this, Nightblade, your reputation will be bad.
CoLd BlooDed
4:07 pm | November 18, 2003
Woah, Nightblade when you write everything in capitals its make you look like a spaz. Why are you pissed over a little criticism?
Nightblade
3:29 am | November 17, 2003
outshining WAdo? what the hell is that supposed to mean? tell me who said it then because NO ONE HAS! lets see you write a story then? ill make fun of it just as you did to mine, you mother****er
Walker
5:12 pm | November 15, 2003
I can't write sh!t, eh? I don't think I've ever seen you being called "Wado under a different name" or "outshining Wado", have you? No. Well, I have. Don't ever say I can't write, you puke, until you learn how to.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Nightblade
2:15 am | November 15, 2003
HAHA! VERY ****ING FUNNY, ASSHOLE! YOU *****ING CANT WRITE SHIT! WALKER, BSSHH! DONT ****ING TELL ME HOW THE **** TO WRITE A ****ING STORY, JESUS IM PISSED!
Mainevent
12:29 pm | November 13, 2003
And there you have it ladies and gentlemen. If Walker said that much about it, I'll probably avoid it because...well, he said that much about it.
Walker
10:43 pm | November 12, 2003
Hmm...

First off, 550 years from now I doubt that it would be that easy to escape from prison. It's even harder than that nowadays. In the future I'd expect they'd have genetic-signature recognizing keycards that only worked with the right DNA signature. You had a regular key and locks that could be opened from the inside, along with having only one guard. They'd probably have motion sensors in the ceiling that could sense that type of mass movement and shut down the base right then and there, too.

Next, you made your prisoners waltz right into the armory. No guards over that much weaponry? Please, spare me the correction next time.

Also, the term "jailer" means the guy who puts you in jail, or the guy who keeps you there, like the guards. Not the prisoners.

After that, it would be simple to squash that rebellion with air support, not waltz around dwiddling with your prison guards/infantry. You send in your big guns, then let the footmen clean everything up that's left.

Lastly, "To war"? What kind of person says that when trying to squash a prison rebellion?

A little more realism, a little better grammar, a little more thought and effort--and I can see this turning into one fine piece of work. Until that happens, though, this was borderline crap.

Semper Fi

-Walker


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