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Comments for 'Hit Hard Ch. 4 pt. 2 --Reclaimer--'



The Author
12:38 pm | March 1, 2004
ok now I just read over it again, and I agree, it is kinda choppy. I'll try to do better next time.
MC's Cousin
10:27 pm | February 29, 2004
So So, but yes there was something about it...

Signing Off


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teemus
5:57 pm | February 29, 2004
This was the first time ive read any of your work. I agree with Cold, some thing about this chapter didnt flow right, it seemed kinda choppy. Good work, im looking forward to the next one.
The Author
6:17 pm | February 28, 2004
I use commas a lot...I never was really good with semicolons though, so...
CoLd BlooDed
5:33 pm | February 28, 2004
I don't know, it just doesn't seem to flow right. When I read it...it just seems like all sentence fragments in a paragraph, you should use commas and semi-colons more often, they make the story flow smoothly.
Anonymous
2:57 pm | February 28, 2004
it was the best i have read in a long time
The Author
12:45 pm | February 28, 2004
And I know the people aren't based of Legendary, but since I have no idea how powerful the battl rifle is, I can't put it on Legendary as I have no idea how long it would take to kill something with it.
The Author
12:31 pm | February 28, 2004
I know its been a long time since I've posted any fanfic. I've just been weighed down with homework and no free time on my hands. Anyway hope you like the story.


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