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Comments for 'The Enemy Within-Chapter Ten: Dark Shadows Hold Dark Secrets'

4:48 pm | July 19, 2004
Good chapter. I love to hear about Covies peeing their pants over rampaging flood forms. And now (that's right I start with and) I flee to my freakishly large ring structure to play some HALO!!!!!!!!!

Dammit Jenkins fire your weapon!!!
Young Gunna
5:49 am | June 26, 2004
I myself am writing I book and I have to say I enjoyed reading this. (Read it all in about 6 hours with breaks in between.) Good battles sequences I got lost as well in the battles. Is there going to be a next chapter?
8:22 pm | June 22, 2004
To FOrunnER: I appreciate your effort in reading through the series. Reading the stories myself, I could see where someone that wasn't in control of the stories would get confused. I guess you just have to bear with it and understand what you can.

Wiley said I was good eh? Well, I suppose that means a lot.

3:48 am | June 21, 2004
3:47 am | June 21, 2004
Good job. I'd never read your stories before, but Wiley kinda said you were good, so I decided to check this series out. I find myself getting lost sometimes, but it might have been me, other than that the story was awsome.
12:09 am | June 21, 2004
Nice story, I'm a little lost since I haven't checked up on your fanfiction lately, sorry.
CoLd BlooDed
10:14 pm | June 19, 2004
Very good to have you back, this was good, almost as good as your other chapters.

No rating, I don't give ratings; I just say whether it was good, great, or bad.

This was great.
MC's Cousin
8:20 pm | June 18, 2004
Well, if I remember right, this is indeed slower paced than the previous ones. But that's not always a bad thing, as long as you make it worth it.
Same quality as the others. And one of the good stories (finally). HBO needs to hire some of us to screen the n00b fiction. Would anyone else agree?

By the way: 9.6/10...isn't that the score that Spliter Cell received from Official Xbox Magazine? I think it is.

Signing Off

6:54 pm | June 18, 2004
Great to be back. REALLY. I had a few-week-long period where I really didn't feel like writing. Then I came back here and read a few god stories and found the motivation I needed. My next chapter is almost ready and should be up next post.

Oh, and as an explination: this and the next chapter are kinda slow compared to the last few. I did this so I could further develope characters and smooth things out. Combat can be a little confusing, so I wrote this up.

11:47 am | June 18, 2004
Great to have you back, MAP.

Awesome story