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Comments for 'HALO: The rise of the 88th squadron, chapter 1: Fight for our Lives!!'



Horror
1:30 am | May 13, 2004
lol this Kyle is a wee bit arrogant
A.P.N JJiggssaw
9:13 pm | March 22, 2004
Ok----First off, you need to work on your politeness a little more on the comments page, and your arguments make no sense (no, Louis isn't listening. Nobody is).

The story. Not bad, not bad at all. Pseudocode is just something you need to learn, even I haven't perfected it (that's bad, I know), and your ideas aren't bad at all. What I need to say has already been said, except that I think it's perfectly fine to make up your own stories, but for me it's more fun to pick up the loose ends left at every book. I think going against the game, however, is sacriligous. Not bad at all.
CoLd BlooDed
10:21 pm | March 21, 2004
And yes, the game is funny at times, but your story just doesn't incorporate that, it makes your characters seem completely oblivious to what is happening. Work on that or don't do it.
Mainevent
6:17 am | March 21, 2004
Actually, The Flood, The Fall of Reach, First Strike, and any other Halo book published by Microsoft is legit. The storylines are created by Bungie. The Authors just expand and add their art. So you were wrong there.

Helljumper is semi wrong. Its perfectly okay to write whatever you want. Thats what makes it a fan fic. Hell put Madonna in it for all I care.

Getting mad at Louis, Helljumper, and the others around here won't help you. It only makes the comments in your section go way down.
CoLd BlooDed
11:57 pm | March 11, 2004
Shut up, Kyle, your sounding like a fool right about now.
Kyle
11:48 pm | March 11, 2004
Oh fuck, indent tag doesn't work. Someone should come up with some kind of BBcode for this section, since it's too restricted without html. LOUIS ARE YOU LISTENING?
Kyle
11:30 pm | March 11, 2004
[indent]Meh, the Flood was such a stupid book. It sucked. Besides, can't a guy use his own imagination and change the story a bit? I DON'T have to read the books. My stories, my ideas, my world. Don't tell me what to write. I write what I want. Okay? You're a jerk helljumper. If you want to write a story based on the game, do it yourself. Besides, TF wasn't affiliated with Bungie in any way, so anything could be possible. You make me sick. William Dietz can go suck his daddy's dick.
[indent]Thomas, thanx for your positive feedback. Don't worry, part 2 is on the way.
[indent]And as for the funny stuff, don't you see it when you play halo?
[indent]Chapter 2 is in progress, and it has more detail. ;D
[indent]And as for the indentation problems, blame the shitty FF submission form that Louis designed. It doesn't keep MS Word formatting.


-Kyle
Kyle
11:30 pm | March 11, 2004
[indent'Y'know, I was originally going to call this fic just "Halo", since I thought nobody had ever thought of using it before, but then I ran a search and found out that a guy named Brent Anderson had already named his fic "Halo," even though his fic had nothing to do with it. I was so fucking mad, but I came up with a better name.
[indent]btw I'm coming out with a new poem based on the fic.
Awacar
5:46 pm | March 11, 2004
I did actually write "all of the famous names around here.", that should clear things up a bit. The thign I mean is that it comes a certain level of quality with famous names, ex. Agent Shade, jilllybean, Wado, etc. etc. (Plus the ones already mentioned, of course)
Not_ToFu
5:10 pm | March 11, 2004
Hey u forgot About ToFu! AWACAR! He's famous!
CoLd BlooDed
3:54 pm | March 11, 2004
Reall? I'm considered a "famous author"? :D
Awacar
3:45 pm | March 11, 2004
It was so-so, as CoLd said, work on the format and spelling, another great thing would be more detail. I didn't get spellbound here as detailed stories get me, ex. CoLds fanfics, Mainevents, you know, all of the famous names around here. What makes them so good is detail and GOOD description of things.

Learn from the ones that get good critics, there is no better school.
CoLd BlooDed
5:01 am | March 11, 2004
I thought it was kinda "newbish", gotta work on the format and spelling, and don't try and be funny, it doesn't work in these stories.
Helljumper
4:36 am | March 11, 2004
This is so contradictory to HAlo the Flood. Lovell was executed by the Covenant, u need to read the books before writing
Thomas Harper
7:43 pm | March 10, 2004
i liked it a whole lot. keep it up. =:) vant wait for the next part.
Nick Kang
6:22 pm | March 10, 2004
I can point out a few errors, but above all this was a good story. You need to indent. To indent, just type [indent] before each paragraph. And also, have you read The Flood, because that clearly states that the bridge crew of the PoA got off on a private lifeboat. Anyway, keep up the good work.


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