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Comments for 'Fafnir Chapter Three - Big Brother is Watching'



el_halo_diablo
3:18 am | August 15, 2002
oh you should be punished for that speech impediment :O
Knightmare
1:05 am | August 15, 2002
I found one, its in some dialogue "You were supposed to get your ass "of" the sofa"
el_halo_diablo
5:24 pm | August 14, 2002
I fell asleep looking for them ;)
Spartan415
4:30 pm | August 12, 2002
very good, couldn't really see any mistakes.
Arch
2:42 pm | August 12, 2002
too good, mantoo good.
saturn
7:59 pm | August 11, 2002
oop. my bad.
Knightmare
11:38 am | August 11, 2002
Consider the first date/time thing before my comment irrelevant, that was an unnoticed error (Obviously) on my part (that too is obvious)(How dumb is this guy?) :-/
Knightmare
10:15 pm | August 10, 2002
If you didn't notice before the two "Carters" are brothers
el_halo_diablo
6:36 pm | August 10, 2002
well im glad you based the story in california, now i see your future in writing will brighten ;)
saturn
6:23 pm | August 10, 2002
the year is 1948. I was a little confused about (notice the quotes) "big brother is watching".
Knightmare
12:16 pm | August 10, 2002
*Laughing* I wonder if someone were to actually fall for that...


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