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Comments for 'To the Last Man Part 1 Chapter 1'

5:54 pm | July 19, 2004
my eyes!!, STB, next time, just say it instead of abbreviating the three words. It sounds better, and use the code, read Mainevent's thing he posted. it will help you
Dave Luck
9:20 pm | July 16, 2004
Some coding would be welcomed.

- Dave.
12:27 pm | July 16, 2004
You have a pretty good plot...although your story could greatly benefit from indenting when somebody speaks, and new paragraphs...It was kinda a little bunched up, and there were a few grammatical and spelling errors...but besides that, it's all good...^.^