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Comments for 'A Series of Wierd Events- Sequel, Part One'



Hunter_Killer
12:17 pm | November 17, 2003
This will be a mix of serious and comedy.
Hunter_Killer
12:15 pm | November 17, 2003
Naw, Alpha Squad always saves the day. =)
FOrunnER
8:23 pm | November 15, 2003
Great story Hunter. Just got a question, is this one going to be a comdy or more serious? To be honest,(note* I think it would be better if it was serious, but thats just my opionon). ANd also, you can join the United Jackals of Halo at the 7th column if you want to.
Nemesis
4:34 am | November 15, 2003
Shadow Spartans, that's my squad 8D
Walker
3:49 am | November 15, 2003
Naw, man, O Squad is the best. Hey, we're humanity's last line of defense, seeing as Omega was the last letter in the Greek alphabet...

Plus we have spiffy uniforms. Our combat fatigues and armor may signify us as "Wearin' Marine Green", but our regimental dress uniforms are red gray suits, black ties, cavalry pants, and shakos for every man--and red berets for the noncoms, which are me and my XO, Lance Corporal Dirk Kennedy. We may be simply a squad, but we ain't just eight men--we're the Omega Squad--the fully-auto Os.

Ah, dreams...

Semper Fi

-Walker
Mainevent
10:34 pm | November 14, 2003
And might I ad that November squad is the BEST DAMN SQUAD IN THE CORPS! CAN I GET A HELL YEA MARINES?

Marines; HELL YEA

Mainevent: DAMN RIGHT I CAN

Great story. Keeping more of me and the guys you got in it is good.
Walker
3:06 am | November 14, 2003
Yes... your writing has improved A LOT. Congrats! I like this one much better than the last one, 'specially cuz it has a lot more me in it! And I have a squad! You have made me happy with these things. Only suggestion I can make is to keep the freeze-ups dotty, unless we have free movement in them... in which case still keep them dotty. That's about it...

Semper Fi

-Walker
Nemesis
7:52 pm | November 13, 2003
i'll admit, your writing is improving by my standards. this is one series of yours i've actually enjoyed. regardless, you really need to try and space out your story...paragraphs and stuff...the indenting is good, but just spreading out the story, so it isn't so packed together will help others read better...you've done well in order to get a comment like that from me ;) 9/10 good luck to all your HBO people


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