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Comments for 'The Fall of Earth, Part One'



Mainevent
11:09 am | October 13, 2003
They talk about over-population with the six-billion we have now.....
MasterGrunt
10:33 pm | October 12, 2003
Good story except for the nine hundred billion thing.
MasterGrunt
10:33 pm | October 12, 2003
Cooooool. Did the grunt get killed? Please say no!lol.
Dirty Commie
3:11 pm | October 12, 2003
Does anyone else see the mind blowing irony in vindicare's post?
FOrunnER
4:28 pm | October 11, 2003
If you don't like fanfics, THEN GET YOUR SORRY ASS OUTA HERE!!!
Alpha Lance
4:12 pm | October 11, 2003
Vindicare, why are you being a son of a bitch. Besides, I bet you don't have the talent to write stories like H_K.

Look Hunter, we got a new asshole on this site.
CoLd BlooDed
3:00 pm | October 11, 2003
Ya that was pretty cool story Hunter_Killer, I also write my own stories in which I started in July. I seem to have gotten better at writing and if you keep it up it looks u could too.
Walker
2:00 pm | October 11, 2003
Shut up, vindicare. Just shut up.
Hunter_Killer
11:13 am | October 11, 2003
LISTEN GOOD AND LISTEN WELL: WU DUDE WON"T POST ASOWE FINALE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GET IT IN YOU HEADS!!!!!!!!! I"VE SAID IT 4 TIMES ALREADY!!!!

P.s: DUH. Read the Inter-Galaxal Wars for info. God damnit! It was printed in the very begining!

No mean to offend, just I don't like having to restate what has already been stated[several times, in several cases] like I said, thenks for all you comments!!!! =)

And i'm in a tiny bit ov a bad mood.

Agent Shade's Nemesis? COOL!!! HSP RULES!!! =)
vindicare
6:07 am | October 11, 2003
what the fuck is an 11 yr old doing spending all his time playing and writing stories about halo?? get a life man. & stop using these friggin signs =) they're just crap!!!
Dirty Commie
5:13 am | October 11, 2003
900 billion people?

First of all, if this wasn't a typo, you might want to chop a zero or two off that figure. And if you did mean 900 BILLION, that's a HUGE number. Nine hundred billion people just being slaughtered was put a little nonchalantly in your story. Maybe it's just me, but when people write something like:

"250,000,000 fighters launched 2,000,000,000 missles, killing over 4 trillion covenant soldiers."

I get irritated. Gigantic statistics mean nothing if they're not in some kind of context or sense of scale.
Hunter_Killer
1:33 am | October 11, 2003
lol how many mistakes in me lasat post? If you get it, you win a lolipop! =^)
Hunter_Killer
1:26 am | October 11, 2003
P.S: Corection... I'm 11. Still, I am very young compared wit you guys...

I love it that I can write like you guys... my Socal Studies and Language Arts teachers liked my suggestions with things like complicated words and smart varoius sentenses. S.S. Teacher asked me If I write one day. I told her the truth, and she asked me to print out some of me Fan Fiction. So, I did. I think she plays favorites, and I'm the Numero Uno, Baby! =)

Well, enough talk... er... type.... from me. =)


- Hunter_Killer

Man: "I'll teach you to kick me!" Cheeko: "I already know how to kick you!" THWACK!!!
- Marx Brothers Short, "Duck Soup", 1930s
Hunter_Killer
1:23 am | October 11, 2003
Then again, if he catches it with me doing that... =(

Although, if you drop me a line at jlp8118@sbcglobal.net I can give you the final part, coppied straight from Microsoft Word in E-Mail form! =)
Mainevent
1:12 am | October 11, 2003
I wonder if you can slip it past Wu and put ASOWE in Inter-galaxal wars....perhaps towards the middle......

You never know...
Walker
12:59 am | October 11, 2003
H_K is only ten, yo. You can write if he can, even though H_K is specially talented. You'd probably do better than some people here. And how long have you been around that you leave Wado, Dispraiser, Alpha Lance, FOrunnER and Mainevent out of your list? Or Gasmask or el_halo_diablo? Go back at least a few pages and your list will grow a lot, trust me.
Spartan 991 A.K.A PaYnE
12:14 am | October 11, 2003
ARRRG I just reset my thing for the 2nd time ok again...AGENT shade, Hunter_Killer, Jilly bean you three are the best fan fiction ppl ever PERIOD.


I would make my own storys but im 12 and i cant write good ones -Payne

WHO LOVES HALO? I LOVE HALO!
FOrunnER
10:41 pm | October 10, 2003
The dollar signs were from me, a half-ass attempt to piss you of about spammers,;)
Alpha Lance
10:37 pm | October 10, 2003
P.S. I want to join Sergeant B.
Alpha Lance
10:33 pm | October 10, 2003
Well...it was good, but it was a little bit too short. Try making the next one longer, but still, this story kickass. Hope to see alot more fic from you.

BTW, hurry up with ASoWE (A Series of Wierd Events)!
Sergeant B
9:57 pm | October 10, 2003
Hey elfster, wanna join my seventh collumn chapter, The Pepperdogs? Or Hunter_Killer, do you want to?
Nemesis (aka Agent Shade)
9:52 pm | October 10, 2003
the beginning was good, but that was because it was based off the introduction of Ensign William Lovell in Halo: Fall of Reach. your overall spelling and grammar is improved, yet your story structure (paragraphs, indenting, etc) could still use a little work. as for the actual plot of the story, i was kind of confused. i didn't know that the Covenant had similar ranks as the humans. and i was also confused about the Confederation attacking Earth, but that could've been something i missed about your United Confederation of Planets. Overal, not bad, but still needs the odd touch up 7.5/10
Elfster
9:36 pm | October 10, 2003
I agree that the end was rushed, but the beginning was exellent and very good, you're writing has become much much better. The fleet battle would have been more descriptive but you would make a good new whipping boy in my fanfiction guild lol.

Just kidding, but i think you're good enough, so heres the link if you want to join:

www.bungie.net/perlbin/blam.pl?file=/fanclub/7186/

till later, and I'll read the Inter-Galaxal Wars so I'll know what the confed is.
SOS.Odin
8:54 pm | October 10, 2003
i dont know what this confederation is really
is it the UNSC?
but it wasnt bad ne ways
kinda rushed the end tho
FOrunnER
8:44 pm | October 10, 2003
GOD DAMMIT! WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO TO, KILL ME OF ANTICIPATION!! HURRY UP WITH A SERIES OF WIERD EVENTS ALREADY;) Good story, but get to work on ASOWE
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8:44 pm | October 10, 2003
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Hunter_Killer
8:22 pm | October 10, 2003
Thankee for you kind comments, o merciful ones!! =)
Master_Chief189
7:57 pm | October 10, 2003
Good story. 10/10
monitor101
7:33 pm | October 10, 2003
Once again a very good look at the future of the UNSC/Covenant wars 10/10!


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