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Comments for 'ODST Lead the Way Chapter 3'

10:43 pm | March 21, 2004
ive seen a Cpl. James before somewhere.
but where?
CoLd BlooDed
5:10 am | March 8, 2004
It took me two days of nonstop reading to finish it. ;P
3:20 am | March 8, 2004
I just got Halo the Flood, i won't post a next chapter until i finnish
4:27 am | March 7, 2004
great story man
that cliff hanger thing does get readers
the first few chapts of my neverland series
had good cliffs. but there runnin low and im
losin readers it seems.
but good job and ill read the rest of yalls
stories later
gotta go
CoLd BlooDed
5:35 pm | March 6, 2004
Hahaha, yeah, I am too, but I've already started on the next chapter of mine. :P
4:57 pm | March 6, 2004
Wow my first 10/10, i feel so special. Thats a lot of pressure that I have to live up to. I'll try not to disappoint. The next chapter is gonna be hott in my opinion, as soon as i transfer it from my brain to the computer. Right now I'm waiting for MCC's comments, we all know he is hard to please, i hope my bridge is reinforced.


First to rise, last to fall
Helljumpers do it all
Feet first into Hell
3:42 pm | March 6, 2004
Great! Awesome detail. Although one thing that I noticed was that if you want the next one to be read by more people, the thing you need is a good cliff-hanger at the end.
3:17 pm | March 6, 2004
very good loved what helljumpers motto one point though you had the sniper and spotter on point i think that you would want some heavy fire power up front incase you come across covies you wanna a wall of lead heading for em
Thomas....o u should no by now
1:39 pm | March 6, 2004
i liked it. i thought that i was different, the setting and all, plus when u had the two jackals killed with a combat knife....that was different but awsome.

CoLd BlooDed
12:20 pm | March 6, 2004
That was great, your writing has improved dramatically. The action was good, but you should make it longer.

I love the dialogue. :D
12:06 pm | March 6, 2004
Three words, "I LOVED IT" Keep it up! By the way, this is one of the few stories im giving a ten out of ten.
Jon M
6:22 pm | March 5, 2004
Once again. Good stuff. You don't disappoint.

Right at the end there were some oversights, like "fox hold" should be "fox hole" and "use to it" should be "used to it" Keep it coming.