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Comments for 'Last Stand Part one'

1:02 pm | March 18, 2003
PARAGRAPHS DAMMIT!!! Today i have commented on two fanfics that use too many and have seen about five that use too little. This will be my scapegoat... I wasn't a big fan of the writing style, that put me in the story. It is your story... Steele was right with his comment regarding the style, some are just out of place... But this one could be given that you change the way it seems to be going...
12:27 pm | March 17, 2003
Not the type of writing style I perfer. In my opinion this style is better used for horror stories, not combat. Although you did do a good job. You should work on 'correct' (or at least how stuff is published in books) writng format. Paragraphs are good!