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Comments for '1st Special Forces group'



lil_jim
6:16 am | August 1, 2003
your story kicked ass, sure the grammers a little of but its agreat idea. keep making more will yah.
Dark Shotgun 117
5:13 am | June 10, 2003
Was a really good story, you should make a whole series about this.
grylsy
6:23 am | April 9, 2003
submitting next story now.... and it's not all spec op stuff now it is about the flood in this part.
Dirty Commie
9:48 pm | April 8, 2003
I'm makin a stand too. Mail them to me.

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At the risk of sounding like an English teacher, stay away from 'you.' It loses the air (if any) of professionalism and is just annoying.
Steele
9:09 pm | April 8, 2003
75(Slightly above average). I took off for alot of small errors(like forgetting an 's' or using incorrect tenses), but I like the SpecOp Group. Keep it up and reread them throughly before submitting...
turbus
12:34 pm | April 8, 2003
overall pretty good, could use spellcheck, but the ideas nonetheless are well refined and well orchestrated. Can't wait to read the next one!
grylsy
6:34 am | April 8, 2003
thanks James and the next one i should have finished by tonight and maybe submit ittonight aswell... might
James Kinsella
12:21 am | April 8, 2003
I will indent for you as well. I think that it was good. Humanity never learns from it's mistakes. Unfortunatly neither do the fanfic writers. SEND IT THROUGH THE SPELLCHECK!!! It will help. Also punctuation could use a jump-start. Get the next one in soon.
Dispraiser
12:16 am | April 8, 2003
[indent]. Mail them to me before you submit the damn fanfic and I will indent it...


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