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Comments for 'Outbreak: Hell's Guardians' |
gruntkiller99
11:15 am | June 20, 2004
SeverianofUrth, no one gives a shit about English class. 343, Fusion thanks for the comments. Guardian, 343 is right.
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SeverianofUrth
9:32 pm | June 17, 2004
Try taking your english classes more seriously.
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Nick Kang
11:53 am | June 17, 2004
[matteroffactly]The code is all! Bow down to the code![/matteroffactly]
NK
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codedude
11:33 am | June 17, 2004
[b]hey[b/]
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CoLd BlooDed
11:22 am | June 17, 2004
Elite, we bug EVERYBODY who doesn't use the code.
So, gruntkiller, use the code.
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Elite Zov
2:02 pm | June 16, 2004
haaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!And U all picking on ME that I never used the damn [b]"CODE???"[/b]
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343 Salty Beans
11:47 am | June 16, 2004
I believe it's from a previous part of the story (there was a section of it down the FF list, I think). The Chief picks up a Hunter's shield and uses it.
343SB
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Guardian
11:44 am | June 16, 2004
question, how do you slam Master Chief's shields into the ground or raise it, if it surrounds his armor through various points that the energy barrier is connected at?? otherwise a 7.9/10
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343 Salty Beans
11:40 am | June 16, 2004
Pretty good plot-wise. Not so good otherwise.
For one you have a giant paragraph in the middle of your story that should be divided up into seperate ones. Second, you missed a lot of periods and commas.
Third, you need a little more foreshadowing. When they go in the structure with the Flood in it, make a little more suspense, You skipped almost straight to the area where they found the Flood. Remember when you first played the level 343 Guilty Spark in HALO? Remember the little bits of creepiness, what with the static-filled radio transmissions, the room filled with blood, the dead bodies, the creepy music, and especially, the cinematic? Try adding that suspense to your story.
343SB
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Fusion
10:30 pm | June 15, 2004
AMAZING!
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Mainevent
8:31 pm | June 15, 2004
Are you the guy Wu talked about missing periods?
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