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Comments for 'Outbreak: Insertion into Hell'



SeverianofUrth
9:54 pm | June 17, 2004
When will these people ever learn... Just write the damn [indent] before every sentence, takes maybe .2 of a second.
SeverianofUrth
9:52 pm | June 17, 2004
The best way to write about SPARTANs is to not have them talk at all. Just have them rip grunts into little pieces, you know, like all stolid and stuff.
Wiley
11:42 am | June 17, 2004
I personally like the Spartans...theyre just hard to write about. Too confusing a personality. I try though....just read my story in the middle of page two and yu'll know how NOT to write a spartan.
Mainevent
12:43 am | June 17, 2004
We don't care if you use Spartans, if you use them correctly. Like the ODST, they have their own personalities and way of acting that shouldn't be butchered.
Solidus Snake
8:20 pm | June 16, 2004
But I like Pseudocode ;)
Gold Elite
8:20 pm | June 16, 2004
Nobody likes SPARTAN stories except the writers. My story I write is going to be about humans, but if I put a SPARTAN in it briefly, is that okay?
Mainevent
4:14 pm | June 16, 2004
Its true name is pseudocode (false code), but we just call it "The Code".
343 Salty Beans
11:20 am | June 16, 2004
I thought it was pretty good. But as always, I have to point out the few mistakes in every good story.

First, there were some grammatical and punctiation errors. Themselves is one word, not two, and some periods, colons, and commas weren't there to help the story flow smoothly.

Second, the Chief's persona seemed...a little off. I can't really describe it. At the end, when he says "open fire on those sons of bitches", it could just go as "Open Fire!" I think since the Chief didn't exactly have a lot of lines or quotes in the fanfic you could identify the Halo novel characteristics with, just having one or two that weren't right caused him to seem strange.

Third, I think the plot was a little confusing. But that's OK. I get confused screwing in lightbulbs (which way DO you turn them to make them tight?)

343SB
OpeningAct
10:17 am | June 16, 2004
It was probably good, but I don't read stories that don't use the code. It hurts my eyes!
Nick Kang
12:43 am | June 16, 2004
Lefty-loosey, righty-tighty, 343SB.

And I really don't think it matters whether we call it the 'code' or the 'pseudocode'. It means the same thing. And the author wasn't using it.

The story was kinda...different...

NK
Solidus Snake
12:12 am | June 16, 2004
Ok, first of all, its not "the code" its called the "Pseudocode". M'kay? Use it:

[b]To bold, [/b] To end bold. Example:

[b]Outbreak[/b]

[i]To italicize (slanted words) [/i] To end italicize. Example:

[i]Chapter 1[/i]

[indent] That is use to indent. MAKE SURE YOU INCLUDE BRACKET [].

[hr] Horizontal bar.
Helljumper
10:53 pm | June 15, 2004
I don't like Spartan stories but that just me.

ODST
Mister Chief 117
8:33 pm | June 15, 2004
Never finished reading the code either did you?


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