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Comments for 'Fallen Angel: Part 2 Escape' |
gruntkiller
2:10 pm | January 4, 2003
sorry about that little fool up with the numbers i musty of got them mixed up while readinf FoR
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Jordan Dotson
12:11 pm | January 4, 2003
Excellant writing gruntkiller, Although i caught some mistakes on the millitary terms. The extraction zone isnt called an EZ as far as i know, Its referred to as Evac Point i beleive. But then again i could be wrong.
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Pilot 415
4:23 am | January 4, 2003
umm.. kelly is Spartan-087, and in the story greg is Spartan-87 so you might wann achange that, but other wise good story
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gruntkiller
1:59 am | January 4, 2003
oh well it takes place 500 years from now terms can change
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gruntkiller
12:31 pm | January 2, 2003
thanks mutated elite!
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Mutated Elite
6:17 pm | January 1, 2003
WOW that's good writing. Ive never seen anything like that. Keep it up! ;)
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gruntkiller
8:28 pm | December 31, 2002
ya i never said they were all Spartans remember.
the next one is going to return to a more grim mood and darker, don't worry about the plot nyou can't realy expect a whole series to take shape in the first two chapters
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Sarge
3:58 pm | December 31, 2002
Well I'm a little confused on how and when it's all happening. How are all the Spartans still alive and such? And when he says 20 of us need evac do the rest die cause later you say only 11 make it out.
You also took a huge turn from the story's previous installment. Last time it was very dark while this time it was not as...grim I guess you could say.
While the plot needs some explaining(I assume it will come later so I won't complain too much). The writing is overall satisfactory a nice read good job.
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gruntkiller
8:26 pm | December 30, 2002
thanks sarge i guess i should of thought of that when i was writing but what did you actualy think of it i can't really tell from your first comment
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Sarge
5:28 pm | December 30, 2002
A few mistakes but thats it.
Oh and why didnt he call for evac sooner?
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