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Comments for 'It Begins...'



el_halo_diablo
6:00 pm | September 12, 2002
yah was kinda obvious it was a dream lol
Geshtu
1:12 am | September 11, 2002
ya it was, now that i looked back i dont think i made that clear........sorry
hello
1:12 am | September 11, 2002
it sounds like this was a dream sequence....was it?
hello
1:12 am | September 11, 2002
it sounds like this was a dream sequence....was it?
MasterChief21
10:30 pm | September 10, 2002
Ehh, its not too bad.
el_halo_diablo
10:01 pm | September 10, 2002
ooooooooh HEATING coming off a flame, like the heat waves from a flame, lol you just left out the 'h' on heating lol.
el_halo_diablo
9:59 pm | September 10, 2002
"eating coming off a flame"???? what did you mean by that Geshtu? anyways, yah it was more like prolouge, but ok I'll be easy on you and say it was alright for the first ever fan fic.
Wado
5:18 pm | September 10, 2002
Not bad, I like the fact it seems like the humans are ordinary Joes/Janes leaves open a lot of possibilities. One thing, it might have been nice to tell the reader the name of the main character. I don't know if it is a male or female character either. Or maybe I just missed it.

Keep up the writing.
Geshtu
2:38 pm | September 10, 2002
This is more like a prologue than anything else
Geshtu
1:59 pm | September 10, 2002
this is my very first post so go easy on me :)


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