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Comments for 'Liberties Bell:The Battle that changed Draco 3:Part 4'



Jessica
11:56 am | July 22, 2004
Muuuch Better...Keep it up! ^.^

Jess
Ishkabibbl
3:29 am | July 22, 2004
20 times? Why so many?
Elitehunter676
7:23 pm | July 21, 2004
Okay I have a question for you readers. Do you guys think my action(What little of it there is so far)is anygood? Because my Chapter 5 is going to be nothing but action so I need to know if I should work on it.
Dave Luck
6:30 pm | July 21, 2004
Well, I think that the stories look better at a lower resolution. Maybe if I crank it down a little it'll help.

- Dave.
russ687
3:47 pm | July 21, 2004
Much better then the last one. You used the code but not quite perfectly; proof-read to catch any minor formatting mistakes.
Slit Throat
12:36 pm | July 21, 2004
Well, it was better than the last one.

Grammar and spelling looked good although it was a little choppy in the beginning.

8/10


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