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monitor101
10:03 pm | September 18, 2003
Great story Elfster I was going to say a little more description but the authors note really helped so 10/10.
Steele
11:04 am | September 17, 2003
Actually a Master Chief in the Navy is the equivilant of either a Master Gunnery Sergeant or a Sergeant Major.

ODSTs use the same ranks as Mareines.

BTW, Walker why do you always put Always Faithful at the end of your comments? Are you a Marine?
Wado
8:22 am | September 17, 2003
The little author's note at the end helped. Nice work Elfster, even though it did read a bit like notes, you didn't try to do too much with the story. As you continue the story will unfold on its own, no need to rush things.

Oh, and be careful with the spell check because some of the errors were correctly spelled words, just the wrong word: i.e., "been" instead of "bean" bag.

Good luck, looking forward to more from you.
Vi3tl3l3oi 023(Return of CPT CRAPPER)
1:59 am | September 17, 2003
hahahaha... augmentations like in Deus Ex.
Walker
12:43 am | September 17, 2003
No, I'm a fourteen-year-old gunning for Annapolis.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Alpha Lance
12:25 am | September 17, 2003
He dosen't always say that.
Alpha Lance
12:25 am | September 17, 2003
oh you mean Semper Fi, yeah he does. And there nothing wrong with it, I acutully think it's cool. And pluse it is his sig. Kinda like my sig that I'm going to use again, or not, but this is what it looks like. And FYI, I got the idea from the great JCDenton.

Alpha Lance
Creator of Halo Trilogy©
Walker
10:28 pm | September 16, 2003
Yeah, Spartans belong to ONI Section Three--the Navy. If you didn't know that, you can tell by ranks. Master Chief Petty Officer, which is what John 117 is, is a Navy rank about the equivalent of a Marine sergeant. Anyone know if the same applies to ODSTs, or are they Marines? I lent my TFOR book to a friend so I can't use it for reference. Btw, Elfster, this sounds like an interesting start to what's gonna be a good story. It already looks like a setup.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Alpha Lance
9:25 pm | September 16, 2003
Most Spartans are owned by the navy. But good job Elfster, and I like the tittle, 'The Rebel' and there were few errors in the story. But like I always say, keep up the great work.
Elfster
8:54 pm | September 16, 2003
Yeah, Sarge B.

But Spartans ARE marines lol.

And besides, don't think I didnt name this story The Rebel for no reason =)
pooman
8:00 pm | September 16, 2003
good.
Sergeant B
7:01 pm | September 16, 2003
Another Spartan! Oh who cares! But anyone that reads my comment should know that I encourage them to use marines as the main character than a spartan.
Elfster
6:25 pm | September 16, 2003
Yeah I was thinking about writing this chapter for a long time now, and i was eager to post something because I havent in so long. I sorta just jotted this down real quick than ran through it to see if I could make some wording better and fix spelling mistakes.

The next chapter has alot more action and more than one little surprise =)
gruntkiller
5:02 pm | September 16, 2003
good i liked it a lot, although its not that original it was enjoyable. this new weapon thingy sounds like somthing that will play an important part later in the series by the way you spent so much time talking about it.


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