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Comments for '5 Way War Part IV: Super Soldiers'



Anonymous
6:59 am | May 24, 2004
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MASTER XBOX
1:17 pm | August 6, 2003
HOW THE FUCK DO I GET TO SEE THE DAM MOVIE SCREW IT LATER HBO FAGGOTS OH YEAH LOCKE YOU SUCK YOUR MOMAS COCK HAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHHA XBOX RULES HALO RULES HALO2 =DESTRUCTION OF PS2 / GC WELL LATER FOR REAL FAGS !!!!!!
MASTER XBOX
1:10 pm | August 6, 2003
WHERS THE FUCKING STORYS ABOUT THE COVENANT STUPID SHIT ASS AND FUCK HBO INSNT THAT A FUCKING MOVIE SHOW I THOUGTH THS WAS A SITE THAT TALKED ABOT HALO2 COVENANT ALIENS DAMMIT IAM HERE WITH A BUNCH OF HBO FAGS FUCK LATER!!!!! WEEEEEEED MAN YOUR A FUCKING FAKE WEED WILL KILL WHITE PEPOLE HAHAHAHAHHAHAHHAAH


HALO 2 KICKES MERTROID PRIME 2 S ASS BIG TIME HAHAHHAHHAHHAAHHAH!!!!!!
Demosthenes
9:26 pm | February 3, 2003
Sorry, I promise I won't get mad like that again. I didn't know you were DOS attacked, that really sux. I've never had a virus on my computer and I'm always afraid. Sorry I forgot to read the Wallpaper posting thing, I was to egear to get it posted because I never thought in my life I would post a Wallpaper, until I downloaded the HALO font from the misc. section. Thanks. And isn't Louis Wu the name of the guy from the book "Richter 10?" that's a cool book (so far, I just started reading it) anyhow sorry again, I was in a crappy mood, I had a horrible crick in my neck. I know you probobly won't read this but I'm posting it anyhow. Also Locke is right, I'm glad you even post fanfics, and even more glad you have this comment section, it's awesome. So happy valentines day and this time I'll actually READ the guidelines for Desktop posting. Sorry ^_^

-Demosthenes
Locke
6:17 pm | February 2, 2003
Gees those HBO folks seem so profesional when they post stuff on the main sight, but when they post comments they can be really... uh....crabby. No offense to anyone, though. I can understand why you would act like that and i appreciate that you even POST fanfics.
Louis Wu
3:49 pm | February 2, 2003
You won't see that desktop on HBO, because it doesn't meet our new image posting guidelines.

You haven't seen your story posted because the site was DoS-attacked last night, and I didnt' get everything running again until this morning.

The fact that you come here screaming like this when you mailed in an entry LESS THAN 12 HOURS AGO makes me want to simply throw your work in the trash - I don't need this sort of crap from anyone. You're 14th in the queue right now, and I've spent the last 3 hours (yes, three hours) formatting all the entries BEFORE yours. It's unclear whether I'll finish the job before we have to head out this morning, in about 45 minutes. (If I don't, the fan fiction section won't be updated before this evening, at which time the queue will probably be even longer.)

Send me a check, and maybe I'll move faster, just for you. Otherwise... try and keep your comments a bit calmer.

It's unlikely I'll see any replies to this - I'm a bit too busy right now to scan the comments section. Anyone with anything they feel they NEED to say about this should send it via email.
Demosthenes
3:24 pm | February 2, 2003
DANG IT! WHAT'S WRONG WITH HBO???? I sent part V last night and six way war sneak preview, and a desktop i made. I mean WHY HASN'T HE UPDATED THE SITE????????????? THIS REALLY SUX!!! THAT WAS MY FIRST DESKTOP, AND I WAS LOOKING FORWARD to SEEING IT ON HBO!!!!!!!!! oh well, tomarrow will be a better day. And by the way, Dispraiser, there is no comedy so far in 6 Way War.(the sneak preview) and there wasn't much in Part V of 5WW. six way war does has some gore in it though, I mean GORE GORE! By the way, has anyone ever read RINGWORLD? It's like the BEST BOOK, beside the Ender series. And also RINGWORLD is a series. It consists of RINGWORLD, THE RINGWORLD ENGINEERS, and THE RINGWORLD THRONE
Demosthenes
5:05 am | February 1, 2003
oh, and , sorry to double post or anything, but...I AM NOT GOING TO MAKE A FOOL OF MY SELF!!!!
"To much butter on bread can easily be scraped off at first, but if you leave it on to long, it will dry and stick" - Demosthenes (Myself)
(That's a true philosophy. If you think about it, you'll understand. Tell me if you don't.)
Demosthenes
4:52 am | February 1, 2003
I'm going to write a sequel to this. It's called
6 WAY WAR! how do you like that title ( hahaha) and the next part of this I post I'm also going to post a sneak preview for 6 way war. Also I made a really neat cover for it. Also why are Locke and Dispraiser having a dispute over my comment section??? well it doesn't matter it's still quite amusing. I like seeing you to argue its funny. Part V isn't going ot have as much comedy as the last one, there's only a little bit. Like one, Redo's about to go to sleep and Cortana yells in his ears. It's an after climax comedy kind of thing. Also from now on I'm trying to put in a quote every time I post a comment. Todays is " I just do what the little voices tell me too" - My uncle. (hehehe) ^_^
Locke
2:21 am | February 1, 2003
Dispraiser, i in know way meant anything as an offense. I was merely trying to make a statement. Also thanks for not going to one of my storys and posting a bunch of negative stuff. I kind of expected you would do that but it was worth taking the risk to make that statement. Also, just because the engineers aren't in the game, dosen't mean they were removed from the Halo plot. I feature them in my story. Also, as for your description of the engineers as "floating things that were basicly cannon fodder like the grunts", i don't know if you read Rall Of Reach or what, but the engineers are highly valued intelegent, beings, and i would describe them as "Large, blue, snail like creatures with tentacles that hover slightly above they ground, not floating things". Also the reason they are called "engineers" is because they engineer things for the covenant, not fight. Also you seem to give lots of intelegent feedback to most storys. Read my series in progress and post some stuff. My main audience isn't exactly a group of intelegent critics, and part 4 of my story is being used as a game review forum! I had some intelegent people reading my story early on, but that group kind of fadded away........
Bean
3:20 am | January 31, 2003
in all your stories the spartans are always in some way getting their asses whooped how many of them are left?
Dispraiser
1:52 am | January 31, 2003
Wow... Pretty mean stuff there... Oh well. But you do understand that te reason those things were not in the game was because they were removed after he wrote them. The floating things were called engineers, and were besicly cannon fodder like grunts, and the Elites had not yet gotten shields. Those are errors... But yeah, I guess he can speculate on them, but go look at some of the early fanfics here. The one about waging a war against aliens called the 'Cortana's'. See, all I want is to make sure Demos here doesn't make a fool of himself later on...
Demosthenes
11:28 pm | January 30, 2003
I just now realized, but at the end when the forerunner ship is exploding they spoke the wrong way. I accidentally used the " symbol instead of the
Locke
11:15 pm | January 30, 2003
Impressive once again, Demosthenes. This time the comedy you added flowed more into the main plot better, making it alot funnier. Also dispraiser, it drives me insane every time you mention you hate the Forerunner! I don't want to give the whole speach again, so check back to the comments on part 2.
Demosthenes
12:58 pm | January 30, 2003
I'll try to take your advice on comedy after climax. Thanks for the tip.
Dispraiser
3:18 am | January 29, 2003
Oh, and for the comedy thing, there is a right time for comedy, and a bad time for comedy. A good time for comedy is DURING OR AFTER A SMALL CLIMAX. Comedy of that breed is used to break tension, and is common in action stories, as most are on HBO. HOWEVER!!! What you wrote is either a story with par comedy or a really bad comedy fanfic. I am assuming, however, that it is a story with par comedy, however it is out of place and unnatural. Put in little things, nothing where you drop the plot and go and laugh for a while and then go back to shooting.
Dispraiser
3:09 am | January 29, 2003
Good, as has become usual for this series though I am persistantly angered by the forerunner. I hate them, and you don't even know who or what they are, human, covenant, robots, hobbits, I don't know, and neither do you... But that is objective, and has nothing to do with the style or content of our fanfic. Spelling is a little problem, commonly confused words mixed up every once and a while like loose and lose, and a few others. But other than that, a fine job.
el_halo_diablo
11:59 pm | January 28, 2003
Well I didn't read it, but it sounds like you should write a comedy fan fic.
weeeeedmannn
10:38 pm | January 28, 2003
dudeee i have alot of weed an yea
Demosthenes
9:20 pm | January 28, 2003
I loved writing that "I'm Melting" part. It just came to me, and I couldn't help but put it in.
Knightmare(MM
3:42 pm | January 28, 2003
Heh, you did a great job with the keep reading factor, but the AI thing (funny as it was) was a little too much. How are we supposed to care for any of your characters if they can 'pause' life long enough to crack a joke?

All in all, great story... I stil can't get over the 'I'm Melting' thing. I'll try to get you some more helpful comments later in the day.
- Knight


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