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Comments for 'The Flood: A force to be reckoned with (Part 1)'



Joe Ehret
1:07 pm | March 21, 2004
Good story the only thing missing is detail. Not the most original but telling from the Covenants perspective helped.
MadJackal
8:57 pm | December 29, 2003
To respond to Steele's comment, technically FUBAR is the correct acronym, but when said, it can be spelled foobar (I learned this from the book that was based on Saving Private Ryan).
spartan 101
11:44 pm | December 9, 2003
i was implying to moniter 101 and hunterkiller. and why the hell was steele indenting? queerish.
spartan 101
11:44 pm | December 9, 2003
i was implying to moniter 101 and hunterkiller. and why the hell was steele indenting? queerish.
spartan 101
11:41 pm | December 9, 2003
good story, more details are needed, but doesnt suck like some saaaaaaayyy........
MadJackal
2:06 am | July 19, 2003
Cool story. I thought that was great. You're 14? Me too! Have you read my first fanfic (The Furious Hatred)? If you get a chance to read it, post a comment!
crashedwarthog
4:51 am | June 29, 2003
hey c'mon guys i'm only 14
HunterKiller
1:46 am | May 12, 2003
Sorry to say, but this story SUCKS!
HaloFREAK
4:30 am | May 11, 2003
i cant get italics to work when typing, how do you do it?
Steele
4:53 pm | May 10, 2003
Yes, everything the others said.

And, it's FUBAR, not foobar. Unless it was a dailect trait...

Italicze the name of ships, and capitalize the word Covenant, please.

Work on the plot and more detail and this'll get better. Or it should...
HaloFREAK
9:41 pm | May 9, 2003
i dunno. kinda boring, and not that original. more details, and spend more time on it. i liked the way you wrote things like" theyre screams were unheard like the countless others before." I'd say spend more time on a plot with characters that you can become familiar with.
monitor101
8:36 pm | May 9, 2003
To be honest the story sucked. Whats the plot and whats the point of non-stop action and killing?
Devil Of Sweden, sorry for possible writing errors
1:53 pm | May 9, 2003
Well... Itīs not a horrible story in any way, but you should write a bit more detailed. And you should also "link" the events in the text to each other so it wont be so counfusing to read. I mean: first it was about two marines and then BANG!!! it was about the crew of a covenant crusier and so on. But the story has potential and I like the fact that it is about some covenants instead of the good old MC.
Devil Of Sweden
1:53 pm | May 9, 2003
I like the fact that your story is about the covenants instead of good old MC. just add some more details to the story and it will be muuuuuuccch better.


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