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Comments for 'The Strive to Survive (Chapter 12: Final Requests)'



CoLd BlooDed
11:27 am | July 10, 2004
Anybody else having trouble submitting stories?
Nick Kang
10:41 am | July 10, 2004
I just submitted ch.3 of Beckoning of Doom and didn't have a problem.

NK
The NEW Zak
1:50 am | July 10, 2004
I know, I think it is a little messed up, a new batch of stories haven't came out in dayyyyys. I wrote a story(not going to advertise)about 4 days ago and it still hasn't come out....


The NEW Zak
Nick Kang
12:48 pm | July 9, 2004
You have a dumb name and a stupid personality, you are also the worst writer on the site, CoLd.
It was necessary criticism!

lol, j/k. I'm messin' witcha.

NK
CoLd BlooDed
2:00 am | July 9, 2004
Thanks for taking the time, Dave Luck and teemus. And lol, I like your way of rating, it's both hilarious and informative at the same time.

I DO want you to read my stories, Dave, the reason why I asked you to so was you could give me advice if needed. I don't mind the occasional flame, as long as it's necessary. :)
teemus
10:08 pm | July 8, 2004
Well Cold, even with my comp down i managed to read your story.
Dave Luck
7:42 pm | July 8, 2004
This story was brought to you by:

Tasty Treets Ice Cream Inc!

Because everything is atttractive, as well as in-depth-taste, especially if you stick your head inside.

Good formatting.

However, I would rather people break their stories into more pronounced paragraphs, like this...

, Paragraph one.
line
line

, Paragraph two.
line
line

It makes it easier to read. Still, fairly good all around.

I skimmed over it to save time, but it has potential.
CoLd BlooDed
4:24 am | July 8, 2004
Anybody else?
CoLd BlooDed
9:52 pm | July 7, 2004
I apologize for almost making you like Flood fics. :P
Awacar
9:00 pm | July 7, 2004
Aww, after reading the some of spanish spartans posts (followed by writing one or three flame posts) it's really enjoyable to read your pieces, CoLd. I especially liked that part when they thought the Flood came out of everywhere, and almost started to worry about the ground housing the Flood.

A good piece of text by a good author. And, you're starting to make me like fanfics with Flood in it. Shame on you! you shall not succeed. :p
'Nosolee
8:35 pm | July 7, 2004
Good story, 9.75/10.

Ressurection of the 10 pt. scale!
CoLd BlooDed
7:33 pm | July 7, 2004
Actually, I've never played Americas Army, anonymous. I've just heard Marines in the game (and in real life, I think) say "Frag out!"

But thanks, anonymous and dave, for the comments. This series is nearly coming to a close - there's at least two chapters left and an epilogue.
dave
7:06 pm | July 7, 2004
good job cold. your great at describing the tension and the overall havoc of the whole escape and such. good job.
anonamous
6:30 pm | July 7, 2004
do any of you happen to play Americas Army because they say it in that too. Good story as usual cold. hope its not the end of the series yet. good job
CoLd BlooDed
5:17 pm | July 7, 2004
Thanks everybody, I'm now at my grandparents house north of where I live. I'll continue my series up here, and hopefully, I will finish it.

Yes, I got "Frag out!" from Halo. Occasionally I go to the dialogue databank on HBO and look for things Marines say; I figure it's good to have dialogue from the game so you know what their voices sort of sound like. Notice in my previous stories (and this one) how there's a resemblance between the dialogue in the game and my text?

That's the explanation. :P
Mainevent
5:13 pm | July 7, 2004
They say frag out in halo 2. I've never heard them say it in Halo 1.
Mainevent
5:13 pm | July 7, 2004
Good stuff CoLd!

I'm not really sure if its plasma the sentinels shoot, looks more like a laser.

Other than the kilometers thing everyone else pointed out, its a good read.
GangstaPimpDaddy
11:31 am | July 7, 2004
So what if I am, maybe you should deal with it.

The Genuine,

The Authentic,

The Ghetto,

THE 1

THE ONLY

*Gangsta Pimp Daddy*
Nick Kang
10:28 am | July 7, 2004
Holy shiznit! I didn't even see this.

Yeah, I also noticed the hundreds of kilometers thing, but other than that, awesome.

NK
Zeta
3:12 am | July 7, 2004
No, the Marines say it in Halo. Great work, CoLd.
Mainevent
2:33 am | July 7, 2004
Rainbow Six probably.
Helljumper
12:48 am | July 7, 2004
Hey CoLd where u get that "frag out" from????????????????????????????????

ODST
CoLd BlooDed
4:42 pm | July 6, 2004
...
Severian
4:39 pm | July 6, 2004
Oh god... is romac back?
CoLd BlooDed
4:33 pm | July 6, 2004
Thanks.
GangstaPimpDaddy
11:11 am | July 6, 2004
Pimpin story cold, off the hizzle.

10/10 Fa sho

The Genuine,

The Authentic,

The Ghetto,

THE 1

THE ONLY

*Gangsta Pimp Daddy*
CoLd BlooDed
4:42 am | July 6, 2004
Oh, and readers, I am going to my grandparents tomorrow in the afternoon. I might be able to get access to a computer and continue writing there, but I'm not 100% sure.
CoLd BlooDed
3:03 am | July 6, 2004
Actually, I'm not. Care to explain? :S
Helljumper
2:56 am | July 6, 2004
"Frag out" You know wat I'm thinking.

ODST
Mastergrunt
4:50 pm | July 5, 2004
I liked the ending with warthog.
Severian
4:30 pm | July 5, 2004
The monotony of greatness... jk
What can I say? This was great.
Slit Throat
3:52 pm | July 5, 2004
Sweetness!

One thing though. If the chunks of debris had been thrown hundreds of kilometers into the air, they'd be in orbit; you probably meant meters.

Anyway, great as usual.


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