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Comments for 'Dubbo's Demise'

8:08 am | March 8, 2004
lol he probly didn't understand El Tee CoLd :P

Dubbo is naturally my fav character too cos he's australian, i mean there's like shit-all games that have any aussies in em, so when i played the PoA for the first time, and i heard Chip's voice, it made me love halo that much more. Also i like how Chip is almost always aggressive and will more often than not be the last man to fall back in a retreat, if he even falls back. I remember playing the PoA and i made myself go 'rampant'. the security came, and i shot all the other guys as well as chip, and as the other guys retreated, chip yelled at em, "come back here ya cowards!" while still firing at me.

Now to me, that shows the true aussie pride that has been long extinct since Gallipoli WW1.

Anyways i've been rambling too long, i still think this is a fantastic story:D
CoLd BlooDed
12:45 pm | March 1, 2004
LOL, ya, but she dies too easy.
Jon M
12:20 pm | March 1, 2004
I think you should write about what that hot chick who pilots the PoA escape pod that briings MC down to Halo.

You know what she's thinkin when MC says, "Punch it."

"Damn! Air brake failure....Oh MC...save me..."
CoLd BlooDed
2:12 am | March 1, 2004
Inaccurate? How?
2:01 am | March 1, 2004
A little confusing and inaccurate with who was in command but other wise fine.
CoLd BlooDed
8:32 pm | February 29, 2004
Yeah! That'd be a great idea! Thanks teemus, another idea is stolen again. :P
12:49 pm | February 29, 2004
NOOOO!!!! DUBBO!!! you should write about Mendoza's demise, or something like that. Good story
5:15 am | February 29, 2004
Write about what Johnson did before Halo, or what he was doing during Halo. If you do, then you could also talk about how he escaped the Flood. That would be cool.
CoLd BlooDed
1:50 am | February 29, 2004
Maybe I should write about everyones adventure before the Flood came.
CoLd BlooDed
4:27 am | February 28, 2004
Thats right, Hawk. :)
8:48 pm | February 27, 2004
There is no 'editor' for HBO fan fiction. This way I understood it:

Louis checks the story for length, if it's too short, it's rejected; unless it's a poem.

If it isn't about Halo, it's rejected.

If it contains anything sexual that the story doesn't need, it's rejected.

If you want somebody to just glance over your story and proofread for context and grammar/spelling like I do for CoLd (:P) you should ask around here. I'm sure there are people who would do that for you if you asked.

If you did mess up and it doesn't link to your old story, there isn't much you can do about it aside from asking Louis to help you. I wouldn't suggest this - Louis is very, very busy. Not just with his beautiful site, but with things outside the site as well. If it's something simple, I don't think he would appreciate it, seeing as how he gets hundreds of e-mails a day. If you think it's something mission-critical that would piss off people, you might want to e-mail him.

I hope this helped ;)
Jon M
4:57 pm | February 27, 2004
Snow? Man I'm in Arizona..What's snow?

Hey Cold, here's a question for you, sorry it ain't about your "good fiction"..

Does you know how to check if your file is too big to submit? I wrote chapter two last night (actually part II of chapter One) and as a word file, it's 37k, but as a text file it's only 19k...which does this editor use? I submitted it and it went through (after about 10 attempts), and I think I also goofed and didn't link it to my series...should I repost it? Any ideas...Thanks.
4:43 pm | February 27, 2004
More snow more not going to school. I like. Well, I can't really think of what you'll write on for the next TSTS. But make it good, or I'll just be disapointed. Then I'll be forced to play more Halo to get back in the mood. WAIT! I'll do it now instead...

2:48 pm | February 27, 2004
Im home today, missed the bus so ill take a guess. Its going to be about....ill guess later, im falling asleep on the key board. =)
Jon M
12:18 pm | February 27, 2004
A little help for the noob here (And another post for you-if that's a good thing) So what does, "getting |337" mean?
12:13 pm | February 27, 2004
That's not a sign, it's a warning. H_K got something like 98 comments in his.

Remember why?
CoLd BlooDed
3:11 am | February 27, 2004
Any guesses what its going to be about? :P
CoLd BlooDed
1:45 am | February 27, 2004
Now I gotta start TStS...
CoLd BlooDed
1:23 am | February 27, 2004
Lmao (to Hawk)! I remember, but it was for an entirely different reason. ;)

|337 means leet, which means elite, which means awesome... :P
CoLd BlooDed
11:55 pm | February 26, 2004
The first signs of getting |337 on HBO is when you have more than 12 comments. :P
9:51 pm | February 26, 2004
Very good. Keep it up. I have only read up to Chapter 6 of Forced Betrayal, but I hope to finish soon. Oh, I don't have to go to school today either. Thank the Lord for snow, man, cause I really needed a break from all that work and no sleep.
9:35 pm | February 26, 2004
YEAH BRO!!! Kick ass I love this story!
8:06 pm | February 26, 2004
The Flood, I just have to read stuff that has the Flood in it. It was good. The Flood sound a little different then the way I remember them, but who really knows? Lol, I don't have to go to school today. I have SNOW. Wait! This gets me into the mood the play AotCR and maybe even TB. Better get to it.

CoLd BlooDed
3:53 pm | February 26, 2004
"I leave home for a few days (hours) and look what happens..."

lol, but I'm serious, I wake up this morning and I go to check HBO, and look at that, 4 more comments! And crashed, Dubbo was another of my favorite characters, and I just tried to write a story about him when you encounter him on 343 Guilty Spark.

MC, I haven't thrown a grenade (but I want to lol) so I'll remember that next time. And to IAmDelta, thank you, and I'll read your story once I get back from school. lol also thanks for the comment, GLAD.
12:45 pm | February 26, 2004
im with teemus
i LOVE it when the main character dies
im seen enough movies and read enough books
that end with everyone a winner
great job
CoLd BlooDed
12:09 pm | February 26, 2004
Helljumper, ya, I do love the Flood, they are pretty damn cool and fun to write about.

To teemus, I've been really busy and when I was editing your story I got kicked off the computer, so I'm doing it now.

To Nick, thanks for the suggestion, but most of the Marines of First Squad were pretty tight. It was only Dubbo and Howard that had a conflict.
MC's Cousin
11:46 am | February 26, 2004
Another one without complaints, when will my job end. lol. Well, I think you need to work just a bit on flow. And shrapnel just doesn't pelt you in the face, it goes into your head. Haven't you ever thrown and experieced a grenade going off? I suppose not. But, it was excellently written. I'm beginning to think that that "M" rating on the front of Halo means that it makes serious players more mature. Hmmm...

Signing Off

8:57 am | February 26, 2004
loved the story man, but being an aussie makes me a bit sympathetic of Chip, anywayz, great story:D
4:18 am | February 26, 2004
the name alone makes me love this story. the writing makes me love the story even more.
4:11 am | February 26, 2004
Very nice. Its nice to see one author on the list and know that at least that story will be good. I hate to do this...but if anybody reading this has some free time, would you mind reading some of my stuff? I'm thinking its too long and too boring right now, but I'll never know unless I get some comments. Thanks.
Jon M...aka The Flu
4:07 am | February 26, 2004
Nice story Idea. No complaints. I've got to read more of your stuff.
CoLd BlooDed
2:33 am | February 26, 2004
That means alot to me Walker, thank you, very much. And I wouldn't have kept writing if I didn't have yours, Odin's, Main's, and the other 1337 writers to be inspired by. I didn't steal the ideas...you don't have to worry about that. :P
2:12 am | February 26, 2004
I think this stands as a shining beacon on how much you've improved since your first stories.
Nick Kang
9:20 pm | February 25, 2004
Great story! Nothing wrong. But one suggestion, in the army, unless they're good friends, they usually don't call each other by their first names.
5:57 pm | February 25, 2004
That was good. I like it when the main character dies. Keep it up man! P.S. did u edit my story?
5:24 pm | February 25, 2004
CoLd you are the man, no complaints as usual, you must love the Flood, I'm gonna try and write a story about them sometime.


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