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Comments for 'Forced Betrayal (Chapter 3: Destruction of 09)'

CoLd BlooDed
11:55 pm | February 26, 2004
Thanks a ton, Mad, and thanks for reading an old series of mine. :D
4:57 am | February 26, 2004
Oh, and I'm really sorry that I took so long to get around to reading these again. I've been so busy that I can't even write my own stories.
4:50 am | February 26, 2004
The Active Cammo in the game is nothing but a temporary powerup, but Stealth and Commando Elites have a different kind of armor than the normal Elites. Their armor sacrifices shields for permanent Active Cammo ability (except of course when they are hit or they fire their weapons, in which case the cammo is temporarily disrupted). Anyway, that was just a clarification on Active Cammo for teemus. As for the story, the battle scenes were better than the ones in your second chapter, but some of them could have been better, as they too did not give much description, such as the part where they leave their Seraphs and start killing the Elites. If I was picky, I could point out technical errors, like the fact that if the Domination really wanted to, it could have scanned the fighters and have seen that they were not damaged. But other than those small things (not battle description, I rank that as kind of important) it was a good story.
1:32 am | January 6, 2004
Ohh yea, over all it was a 9.5/10
1:30 am | January 6, 2004
It was good, but short. Over all it was nice, the only complaint i have is wouldnt the Camo generater run out?