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Comments for 'The Final Conflict: Chapter 1'



TGC
7:42 am | May 4, 2004
Sweet!
Blade
10:41 am | September 25, 2003
Alright, I'll keep these things in mind for the next chapter. I hope I can post it sometime on Sunday because I'm busy with schoolwork and other things until then. I'm glad you guys liked it!
Walker
1:23 am | September 25, 2003
Note: About the sidearms thing, I can understand if he took it off a dead guy, but that was something you should have explained. Your story wasc a 9.2/10.
Walker
1:15 am | September 25, 2003
Ten years without a promotion, especially in wartime, in the enlisted ranks, means you are poor quality fighting material. You could at least have made Johnson a Corporal. Sergeant would be preferable. An officer would be understandable. You see where I'm going? I think so. Also, unless they are special assignment soldiers, such a snipers, drivers, or heavy weapons operators, enlisted soldiers do not carry sidearms. Other than that, it was very good. You should keep writing; we need more quality here.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Alpha Lance
8:56 pm | September 24, 2003
Nice, it was good I have to say. I also love how you put that suspence at the end. Keep it up.
Sergeant B
10:21 am | September 24, 2003
good man. keep it up.


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