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Comments for 'Another ONI Black File: Halo – We Got There First: Part 9'



Steele
11:56 am | September 8, 2003
Figures. I leave and everyone pours back in. That's just wrong.

Like always, an enjoying read. Other than what Wado said, nothing else to say. Keep it up, ol' bean.
Alpha Lance
3:00 am | September 6, 2003
Damn. I tell you every time i get home from school to read and write comments. Someone always beat me to the comment collumn and write what's wrong with the story. I really never get a chance to tell what's wrong, so all I really get to write is stuff like (that was good). But I will stop my bitching, besides, its no big deal. I have nothing against anyone, great story, 9.7/10.

Alpha Lance
Creator of Halo Trilogy©
Reiyou
12:25 am | September 6, 2003
Damn... If only I could write like that...

Keep up the great work!
Lord Revan
10:08 pm | September 5, 2003
I love this series man. Keep up the good work.
Arthur Wellesly
8:38 pm | September 5, 2003
Damnit, let that slip... comes with playing too much Halo, I guess :)
Wado
6:14 pm | September 5, 2003
Great job on the story. The mood was set nicely.

You somewhat broke out of mode near the end, when you said "Flood warrior" whereas before that you described things mysteriously, calling them zombies. Probably should have kept using zombie or zombie warrior creature. The same thing earlier when you started calling the Flood Spores "parasites" without providing any description of why you called them parasites (how would someone know they were parasites?)

Other than that, great story.
FOrunnER
3:00 pm | September 5, 2003
Great man. I hope these series never stop! 10/10
Hikaru-119
12:03 pm | September 5, 2003
Not abad story. Keep up the good work.
James Kinsella
11:04 am | September 5, 2003
Wow, Arthur I was there when you started righting like six months ago. It has only gotten better man. Keep it up.
Havok
2:42 am | September 5, 2003
geezus...so it hasnt taken you long to continue the series or anything... keep it up.
Hunter_Killer
10:03 pm | September 4, 2003
Yep.

Also:

READ THE ADVENTURES OF LT. JAKE!

AND A SERIES OF WIERD EVENTS! =)
Mainevent
7:12 pm | September 4, 2003
Good addition.


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