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Comments for 'The awakening (life of a Spartan) chap 2'



SplatterChris
10:53 am | May 16, 2002
Exept for the start and some confusing parts, this is really good. You have some potential, just try to make it better, you can do it.
Ryan
2:08 pm | May 8, 2002
You have some potential. Just listen to our advice, and make an effort to adhere to it. We know what we're talking about, believe it or not.
Jaywhit10
2:54 am | May 6, 2002
It's good but needs some more detail and please, please make some paragraphs. Thanks its fine except for those keep writing them you'll get it.
agsbladerboy55
12:45 am | May 6, 2002
hey c'mon sombody post a comment tell what ya feel so i can work on it
JONpetch
10:39 pm | May 5, 2002
Started off slow and got confusing in parts, but a really good ending. Enjoed reading it...


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