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Comments for 'Revenge Part II: The Battle'



UNSC-StaffSGT
7:15 pm | September 20, 2003
Nice story but some confusing part though, they might have contributed from the choppiness. But ala-in-all good work here.
UNSC-StaffSGT
7:15 pm | September 20, 2003
Nice story but some confusing part though, they might have contributed from the choppiness. But ala-in-all good work here.
Alpha Lance
4:51 pm | September 20, 2003
Yes, this was a nice story, but. You really got to chop up the paragraphs. And star a new paragraph when some new talk. It's all bunch up, har to read. So please fix that in the future.


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