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Comments for 'Halo: Prophet of Love'

7:06 pm | May 1, 2004
I just noticed that calvin, from the "calvin and hobbes" comics is one of the pictures an d he has on Master Chief's helmet. That's just cool.
11:56 am | April 29, 2004
1Rudeness is impolite. I don't know if you meant to come across rude 343, but that's how I perceived it.

2)If you are the person behind annonymous, sexy turlte, and sexy texy, then your efforts are in vain.
Sexy Texy
11:17 am | April 29, 2004
The story was of high interest. Your usage of metaphors and similies was excellent. The flow, continuity and creativity also showed great promise. I see a future science fiction writer. Keep up the good work and let you inhibitions run wild.
12:00 am | April 29, 2004
1.)Ummmm, I didn't mean to be rude and if I did I apologies.

2.)I am not annonymous, or sexy turlte, or sexy texy. In fact, I don't even know who they are.
10:55 pm | April 28, 2004
Nick Kang: 1.)Just because marines are bad ass doesn't mean they have bad grammer. I don't think marines would attend Westpoint. If "mustn't" doesn't fit in marine dialouge then what does? Does it really matter? 2.)Yes, it was a figure of speech. 3.) Too little detail you lose your reader. Too much detail you become monotonous. 4.) I screwed up on the format, So sue me.
Nick Kang
4:30 pm | April 28, 2004
And you also need to pay more attention to where all the dialogue goes. I found myself reading a solid paragraph of dialogue, and got so confused I didn't even care what they were saying.

Nick Kang
4:05 pm | April 28, 2004
The story was pretty good, but I can find a few errors.
1. I noticed the Marines in the story spoke with excellent grammar, saying things like 'mustn't' and 'we will'. Although I realize the latter fits more, but can you picture a sadistic badass Marine saying 'mustn't'?

2. Pin the head of a bumblebee 100 miles away? Please tell me if that was a figure of speech. If not, a bullet can't even travel three miles today. In the future, perhps they could hit 5 miles, but definelty not 100.

3. You need more detail.

2:35 am | April 28, 2004

7:44 pm | April 27, 2004
First part not bad. Is there actually 'love' in this story of does the title mean other wise?
I am not saying I go for that kind of stuff but it is different, and some of you guys need to lighten up for crying out loud.
Nick Kang
12:32 am | April 27, 2004
The Prophet of Love? I took one look at the title and something rgistered in my brain that said: "Halo love story!" Of course, I'm not saying it actually is a love story, cause it might be not, but I refuse to read anything about Halo that has the word 'love' in the title.

CoLd BlooDed
10:46 pm | April 26, 2004
To the first two posters...

You spelled Turtle "Turlte" and Anonymous "Annonymous", so don't tell him you didn't finish because he spelled bastard wrong.
6:14 pm | April 26, 2004
The story is split up in two parts . Also, I noticed that I spelled 'basterds' wrong, sorry about that.
Sexy Turlte
3:00 pm | April 26, 2004
didn't finsh, spelled bastard wrong
1:53 pm | April 26, 2004
didn't finish. spelled bastard wrong