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Comments for 'The Huntress' |
MadJackal
1:10 am | June 12, 2004
Good job! I enjoyed reading it! The action was well described and aside from the formatting errors and a few small technical errors, it was very good for a first fanfic. One thing that struck me as odd was when the infected Elite was firing its shotgun at point blank range at your main character. At close range like that, even on Legendary, one shot is usually sufficient to take down an Elite (if you are literally touching the Elite with your shotgun and if the Legendary Elite is already damaged; if he's not weakened, then it may take two). But if you imagine an Assault Rifle in the place of the shotgun in your story, it's fine. Again, a relatively minor technical error, one that did not take away from the story. Keep up the good work!
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The Huntress
7:24 pm | June 9, 2004
k, thanks!
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MadJackal
6:48 pm | June 9, 2004
I don't have time right now, but I promise that I'll get around to reading your story soon!
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The Huntress
10:06 pm | April 30, 2004
oh, and...Thanks guys!
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Keyes
1:57 am | April 12, 2004
Um... is it just me, or am I repeating? Sorry about that. :-0
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Keyes
1:57 am | April 12, 2004
Am I repeting... Opps, sorry. :-0 Not the first time of done that, but still not fun.
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Keyes
12:45 am | April 12, 2004
Really? Umm... well, try cutting and pasting the URL. That worked for me. If it doesn't work, let me know.
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Keyes
12:45 am | April 12, 2004
Really? Umm... well, try cutting and pasting the URL. That worked for me. If it doesn't work, let me know.
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Keyes
12:45 am | April 12, 2004
Really? Umm... well, try cutting and pasting the URL. That worked for me. If it doesn't work, let me know.
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Riley217
7:48 pm | April 8, 2004
Female Power you do not see much of that on this web site!!!!!!!! Alright cool story!!!
Very different style from what I have read;)
I like!!!!!!
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The Huntress
5:17 pm | April 7, 2004
hey keyes, it wouldn't let me. i typed in the url for the name stuff, and it brought up this thing that said: url not found. now what?
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Alexander Valient
7:19 pm | April 6, 2004
Wow. That was a good story! I hope we all see more in this series.
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wiley
1:17 pm | April 6, 2004
heh, i did the 1337 namer and It gave me this:
name:Eyme 'Yocudee
Rank: Gold
cool....
BOLL;s a genius..
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The Silver Spartan
11:22 am | April 6, 2004
I really liked this story, It was very good, especially for your first it was way better than mine! Just a few basic things that will help your story stand out are:
1.) When you want to indent a paragraph (tab on the computer) than you need to type [Indent]otherwise nothing happens.
2.) When you want to use italics you have to type [I]to start them and [/I] to finish them, the italicized text goes in the middle.
3.) When you want to use bold than you have to type [B]to start them and [/B] to finish them, the bold text goes in the middle.
All of this is covered in the "Read this before submitting fiction" button (or something like that. And one more thing shotguns don't shoot bullets, they shoot "shells" which are tubes with lots of pellets or BB's in side of them, when the shotgun is fired they all fly out and hit in different spots. Other than that your story was great, 9.4/10
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Slimby
8:11 am | April 6, 2004
Good. First ever female Covenant story, I reckon. Just read it through thoroughly and carefully after you have finished though, you got some words like tried mistaken with tired, it's a common spell-check gap. If you want someone to check for spelling, punctuation, that sort of thing I am a real stickler for that, email me at spyroguy@hotmail.com. All in all a cool story, not enough fics are done using the Covenant as the main character well, let alone a female one in the first Halo! Keep up the good work. Just remember that paragraphs are your friend.
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Agent Shade
1:59 am | April 6, 2004
i agree, the concept idea for a female gender in the Covenant caste system is a brilliant idea. and like Wiley had said, the beginning started off fine, but that last paragraph was pretty rough to read.
you have a good idea here in the making nevertheless, keep it up
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Keyes
1:33 am | April 6, 2004
Wow, now thats a good read. Very nice. I hope you don't just end the story so soon. Keep up the good work. If you want a good Elite name, you can go to http://nikon.bungie.org/misc/stuntmutt/l337name/ and enter what you want. Good job though. Keep it up.
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Pooman
7:44 pm | April 5, 2004
I agree with Whiley and Clyde. 9.2/10
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Clyde
6:12 pm | April 5, 2004
neato story, I enjoyed it!... you need to work on those covy names though ;)
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Wiley
2:29 pm | April 5, 2004
Hey, not bad. First story featuring female Covanent, I belive.
You could have split up the last section of text, making it 2 or 3 paragraphs instead of one.
Other than that, it was well written. I'd like to see where this is going.
9.5/10
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