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Comments for 'The Petersburg Affair: Part I, Chapter 1'



Knightmare
11:58 am | August 20, 2002
I had a hard time reading it lol.. maybe its just me
el_halo_diablo
11:18 am | August 20, 2002
um is it just me, or did this person jump from being on a boat and then suddenly BACK in the streets of St. Petersburg?
vector40
10:10 am | August 19, 2002

There's nothing wrong with the indentation. Very readable - nice work, Saber.

-v

Knightmare
5:44 am | August 19, 2002
Well yeah... I'd still stick with my previous advice.
Knightmare Wolf
5:42 am | August 19, 2002
I like it a lot, got some potential... Cut down on the use of 'the' and indent, I just did a quick skim though so i wouldnt expect anything pin-point from me till a few hours from now lol...


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