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Comments for 'HALO: Dark Aftermath'



The Author
4:03 am | February 14, 2004
Yeah I knew that big adhesive thing wouldn't prove to be popular with readers. And about the [indent] thing. I missed the part that said how to do that. I only learned recently.
MC's cousin
12:36 pm | February 7, 2004
I'll be brief, one not ruins, a wave of heat and other destructive forces swept up and down spin of the ring at the end of HALO: The Flood. Effectively glassing the surface of the ring, don't believe me, ONE HUNDRED MEGATON (three words) pretty convincing don't you think.
Secondly, it wuold take A LOT MORE than a really strong adhesive (aka Epoxy) to get that ring back together.
WHY? you might ask, well I'll tell you. The thing is huge dude 100 kilometers in diameter and 22 in width, like I said BIG. The forces on that ring would be ENORMOUS, more than GLUE could handle. PLus there's the fact of reconnecting all of those little barried connections within the ring. BIG DEAL.
Lastly, one year? that is just plain rediculous. Try upping that by a few decades.

Signing Off

MCC
Brockocoli
6:51 pm | February 6, 2004
I agree with Iamdelta. Realistic? No. Interesting? Oh yeah. The intro is very rough. (use better wording). Give an explination of how the Spartan III's got there. Aparently they have been training more. Some need to die in Ch 2. Make a good twist.....hmm......just an idea.
Hawk7886
6:27 pm | February 6, 2004
"P.S Sry if I was too critical."

If I [i]were[/i] too critical =P
Hunter_KIller
11:41 am | February 6, 2004
COrrection:

"... interesting story like Delta here said."
Hunter_Killer
11:37 am | February 6, 2004
[indent]Yah, and a little better grammer and [i]indent[/i] sometimes. After you divide it up into readable chunks called paragraphs.

[indent]Other than that, interesting story like Delta her said.

And no, I'm not retarded and belive I have to use [indent] here. Just makin a point for some of us...

"... A Very Powerful Adhesive" Hmm... what could glue a HALO back together? Do the flood find it tasty? If so.... =)

- H_K =D

P.S Sry if I was too critical.
IAmDelta
3:27 am | February 6, 2004
You write decently, but try to develop a better context and a sense of realism. Sticking Installation 04 back together with an extremely powerful adhesive? A stretch. An explanation of why we are doing this would also be nice. And they're big and bad, but 11 Spartans can't just up and kill 50 elites along with all the rest without batting an eye. The style is ok, but the story could use improvement.


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