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Comments for 'The Enemy Within-Chapter One: In the Shadows' |
Mind_Affecting_Parasite
2:00 pm | April 2, 2004
Well, I'm making a post here just incase some random person is reading the whole of my series or is scavenging the archives.
I am sorry for the crappy format and look of this piece, the beginning of the series. I, at the time, didn't know "the code" and so had to make it all choppy in paragraph format. I may decide to rewrite this piece after I complete the running section of the series, and the prolouge which I have decided to write afterwords (thsi is partly because I didn't really know how to back the story at the time, but now I have thought about it and have come up with a feasable backsory that with hopefully be intertwined with a couple of my future stories/series).
-MAP
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Jenkins
2:23 pm | February 23, 2004
Minimal spelling errors, good story line, and nice sentence structure. I give it three thumbs up. Hey where did that third thumb come from.
-Dammit Jenkins fire your weapon!!
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MC's Cousin
1:45 am | February 15, 2004
It was alright, but like you other story (PBP), your trying to write along a pretty solid side story path. DANGEROUS WATERS! It's alright so far, and you must like the Covie B* alot.
Signing Off
MCC
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