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Comments for 'Sarges Platoon (Chapter 2)'



Torch99
6:11 am | December 1, 2002
more action will bring the reader into the story more. Dont worry about the length. More action would make this a lot better
Bobby
10:29 pm | November 30, 2002
I CANT!!! If I did what I wanted to it would be a million words long!!!
chief15
6:13 pm | November 30, 2002
It was okay but it could have been a lot better. You should emphasis more on the fighting. Other then this it was fine.
Bobby
10:38 pm | November 29, 2002
Thanks! I thought It would suck!
someguY
8:17 pm | November 29, 2002
that was exellent


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