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Hawk7886
7:59 am | February 12, 2004
I can't believe I missed such a simple point. Thanks for that. I have to say, the explosion was awesome anyway you look at it.
MC's Cousin
5:59 pm | February 11, 2004
Almost forgot, that explosion DID NOT blow Halo up! The structural integrity was compromised by the giant crater where the POA was previously, causing the ring's inertia and just plain bigness reip itself apart.

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MC's Cousin
4:12 pm | February 11, 2004
But stayed in reletively the same location as the original orbit of the ring, making it convient to add in future Bungie fiction.

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Hawk7886
7:52 pm | February 10, 2004
It effectively glassed the ringworld AND blew it into lots of little bits that went spinning in every direction. . .
MC's cousin
3:45 pm | February 10, 2004
Also bud, you use the word "about" a lot. While this can be used, try ti be more specific. I'm not telling you to never use "about" any more, and i'm deffenetely not telling you to use something like: "after two minutes and four seconds MC and the crew was done." Just make it more broad "after two minutes they had cleared out all the rooms." See? Much better. Plus, remember, that blast would have had enough power to effectively glass the surface of Halo 04 but remmeber all those tunnels you fought in, in the game (hint hint).

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IAmDelta
3:38 am | February 10, 2004
This is becoming a pet peeve. Please, please get your verb tenses down. It is impossible to read a story if you are constantly getting fouled up by goofy diction. I'm not asking for perfect grammar, but how long does it take to proof read something? Interesting story, but watch out, you might end up conflicting with something already written.


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